Part 1
Examiner
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidate
Yes I I had a child bicycle it was yellow I like But I often go to too school.
Examiner
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidate
It was very popular when I was a child, but now it is more popular popular than bike is a car in my country.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Score: 35.0Suggestion: 先直接回答是否有自行车,再用一两句补充颜色或用途。注意使用自然表达“a children's bike”,避免重复“I”,并改正“go to too school”为“ride it to school”。“I like”后面需要补充具体对象或删去。
Example: Yes, I had a small yellow bike when I was a child. I often rode it to school, and I really enjoyed cycling around my neighbourhood.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Score: 40.0Suggestion: 回答时要明确说明现在自行车是否流行,并正确比较自行车和汽车。可用“Bikes were more popular when I was a child, but nowadays cars are more popular”表达对比;避免重复“popular”,并补充一个具体原因或例子。
Example: Bikes were more popular when I was a child, but nowadays cars are more common in my country. Many people prefer driving because it is more convenient for commuting, especially over long distances.
× Yes I I had a child bicycle it was yellow I like But I often go to too school.
✓ Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was yellow, and I liked it. I often rode it to school.
原句把多个意思不同的分句直接连在一起,缺少适当的标点和连接,导致句子结构不清楚。“a child bicycle”也没有清楚表达“小时候有一辆自行车”。建议把不同信息拆分成完整句子,并用“a bicycle when I was a child”表达“我小时候有一辆自行车”。
× Yes I I had a child bicycle it was yellow I like But I often go to too school.
✓ Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was yellow, and I liked it. I often rode it to school.
问题谈的是小时候的经历,应该使用过去时。原句中的“I like”和“I often go”应改为“I liked”和“I often rode”。谈论过去经常发生的事情时,动词也要使用过去式。
× Yes I I had a child bicycle it was yellow I like But I often go to too school.
✓ Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was yellow, and I liked it. I often rode it to school.
“I liked”后面缺少宾语代词,听者不清楚喜欢什么。这里的“it”指前文的自行车,因此应说“I liked it”。提到前文已经出现的单数事物时,可以用“it”避免重复名词。
× It was very popular when I was a child, but now it is more popular popular than bike is a car in my country.
✓ Bikes were very popular when I was a child, but now cars are more popular than bikes in my country.
这里谈论的是自行车和汽车这两类事物,应用复数“bikes”和“cars”。相应的系动词也要使用复数形式:“bikes were”和“cars are”。注意名词单复数要与谓语动词保持一致。
× It was very popular when I was a child, but now it is more popular popular than bike is a car in my country.
✓ Bikes were very popular when I was a child, but now cars are more popular than bikes in my country.
“when I was a child”描述过去,因此应使用过去时“were”;“now”描述现在,因此应使用现在时“are”。根据时间词选择相应时态,避免把过去和现在的时间关系表达混乱。
× It was very popular when I was a child, but now it is more popular popular than bike is a car in my country.
✓ Bikes were very popular when I was a child, but now cars are more popular than bikes in my country.
原句的“more popular than”后面没有清楚地接上比较对象。这里要比较汽车和自行车,所以应说“cars are more popular than bikes”。使用比较级时,确保比较双方是同类事物,并把比较对象放在“than”后面。