Part 1
Examiner
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidate
Yes, I had back when I was five years old. It's the time that I just learned how to bicycle and my dad gave it for me to my birthday gift. It's a pink bag and it's very fit, fitable for me, for my finger, because it's not too big.
Examiner
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidate
Yes, I think so because uh, when I worked in the road, I saw many of people will ride a bike to go to school, go to work or after a day they will ride a bike as they're relaxing activity, uh, in the park, in the road or someplace.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Score: 38.0Suggestion: 先直接回答是否有自行车,再补充年龄、礼物来源和外观即可。注意语法和词汇:用“I got/had one when I was five”;“learned how to ride a bike”;“gave it to me as a birthday present”;自行车应说“pink bike”,不是“pink bag”;表达大小合适可说“the right size for me”。避免重复使用“fit”,并把回答控制在三句左右。
Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was five. My dad gave it to me as a birthday present, just after I learned how to ride. It was pink and the right size for me, so I really enjoyed riding it.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Score: 43.0Suggestion: 观点明确,也举出了上学、上班和休闲骑行等例子,但句子过长且有较多重复和填充词。可先回答“Bikes are quite popular”,再用一两句说明常见用途。注意说“when I’m out/on the road”而不是“when I worked in the road”;“many people”而不是“many of people”;“a relaxing activity”而不是“as they’re relaxing activity”。地点可用“in parks or along the streets”,并避免重复“go to”和“ride a bike”。
Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. I often see people cycling to school or work, especially in busy cities. Others ride them in parks or along the streets for exercise and relaxation.
× Yes, I had back when I was five years old.
✓ Yes, I had one when I was five years old.
这里的 had 后面缺少宾语。前文询问的是自行车,因此可以用代词 one 代指 a bike。
× It's the time that I just learned how to bicycle.
✓ That was when I had just learned how to ride a bike.
学生在讲述童年过去发生的事情,应使用过去时。将 It's 改为 That was;had just learned 表示在后面提到的过去事件之前刚学会。
× My dad gave it for me to my birthday gift.
✓ My dad gave it to me as a birthday gift.
表示把东西给某人时用 give something to someone;表示“作为生日礼物”时用 as a birthday gift。这里 for 和 to 的搭配不正确。
× When I worked in the road, I saw many of people will ride a bike.
✓ When I worked on the road, I saw many people riding bikes.
表示看到某人正在做某事时,可以使用 see + 宾语 + 现在分词,因此这里应使用 riding,而不是 will ride。另外,表示“在路上”通常用 on the road。
× I saw many of people.
✓ I saw many people.
many 直接修饰可数名词复数时,不加 of。应说 many people。只有在特定结构中,例如 many of the people,才需要使用 of。
× They will ride a bike as they're relaxing activity.
✓ They will ride a bike as their relaxing activity.
they're 是 they are 的缩写,不能用来修饰名词 activity。这里需要表示所属关系的物主限定词 their。
× In the park, in the road or someplace.
✓ In the park, on the road or someplace.
表示在道路上活动时,通常使用 on the road,而不是 in the road。