Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Soruyu doğrudan yanıtlayın ve bisikletin rengini, ne zaman aldığınızı ve nasıl kullandığınızı kısa, tamamlanmış cümlelerle açıklayın. “It was color red” yerine “It was red” veya “It was red, my favorite color” kullanın; “attraction of bike cyclists” ifadesi doğal değil, bisiklete binmeyi sevdiğinizi belirtmek için “I was really interested in cycling” deyin. Tekrarları ve “um” gibi dolgu seslerini azaltın; yanıtı yarım bırakmayın.

Example: Yes, I did. My dad bought me a red bike when I was about 13, in sixth grade. Red was my favorite color, and I loved riding it around my neighborhood.

Suggestion: Görüşünüzü net bir giriş cümlesiyle belirtmeniz ve toplu taşımanın sınırlı olmasını gerekçe olarak vermeniz iyi. Ancak “limited public transportation” öncesinde “a” kullanmayın; “their professionalism” yerine “their professionalism” veya daha doğal olarak “their cycling skills” deyin. Bisiklet, scooter ve elektrikli scooter arasındaki ilişkiyi daha açık kurun. Dolgu seslerini ve “they, they” gibi tekrarları azaltarak bir somut örnek ekleyin.

Example: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, partly because public transportation is limited in some areas. Many people use bicycles or electric scooters for short trips. We also have a lot of skilled cyclists, especially in the bigger cities.

× Yes, I did have a bike and it was color red, which is my favorite color.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike, and it was red, which is my favorite color.

In this sentence, red is the adjective describing the bike. The phrase it was color red is not grammatically correct. Say it was red, or it was red in color.

× That one that's my dad bought me when I was in 6th 6th grade and I was like 13.

✓ That was the one my dad bought me when I was in sixth grade, when I was about 13.

The phrase that one that's my dad bought me incorrectly combines that one with a relative clause. Use that was the one my dad bought me, or simply the one my dad bought me. Avoid repeating sixth.

× I had the the like the attraction of umm for bike cyclists.

✓ I was attracted to cycling.

When describing interest, use the adjective attracted followed by to: attracted to cycling. The original phrase attraction of ... for does not form a correct expression. Remove repeated words such as the.

× Umm so my dad just bought me a.

✓ So my dad bought me one.

The sentence ends with the article a, but no noun follows it, so the thought is incomplete. Use one to refer back to the bike, or finish the sentence with the appropriate noun.

× We have a limited public transportation.

✓ We have limited public transportation.

Public transportation is an uncountable noun in this context, so it does not take the article a. Say we have limited public transportation.

× They are famous for they professionalism also.

✓ They are also known for their professionalism.

Use the possessive determiner their before the noun professionalism. They is a subject pronoun and cannot show possession. Also, placing also before known sounds natural in this sentence.