Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 「I had a bike when I was a child.」という直接的な答えはよいですが、その後の文には文法と語彙の誤りが多く、内容が途中で途切れています。「from my parent for presents」は「as a present from my parents」、「when I was in elementary」は「when I was in elementary school」、「maybe the six years old」は「when I was about six years old」と言います。また、「I practice the」は不完全なので、「I practiced riding it in my neighborhood」のように具体的な内容を加えましょう。過去の出来事なので、動詞は一貫して過去形にしてください。

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me as a present when I was about six years old. I practiced riding it in my neighborhood, and I often used it to visit my friends.

Suggestion: 「Bikes are popular in Japan」という意見は明確ですが、「the buck」は「bikes」、「at the daily transportation tools」は「as a means of daily transportation」に直す必要があります。また、自転車・車・電車を同じ種類の交通手段として不自然に並べているため、「Many people use bicycles for short trips, while they use cars or trains for longer journeys」のように比較すると論理的です。最後の「the students for high school or the universal」は意味が不明確なので、「high school and university students often ride them」と表現しましょう。理由や具体例を、不要なフィラーを減らしながら2〜3文でまとめると、より自然で効果的です。

Example: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Japan. Many people use them as a means of daily transportation, especially for short trips. For example, high school and university students often ride bicycles to school or to the nearest train station.

× I got the bike, uh, from my parent for presents when I was in elementary.

✓ I got the bike from my parents as a present when I was in elementary school.

Parents should be plural because the speaker is referring to both parents. Present should be singular because the speaker received one bike as one gift.

× I got the bike, uh, from my parent for presents when I was in elementary.

✓ I got the bike from my parents as a present when I was in elementary school.

As a present is the natural expression for describing the purpose or role of a gift. For presents is not appropriate in this context.

× I got the bike, uh, from my parent for presents when I was in elementary.

✓ I got the bike from my parents as a present when I was in elementary school.

A is needed before the singular countable noun present. The phrase a present means one gift.

× I got the bike, uh, from my parent for presents when I was in elementary.

✓ I got the bike from my parents as a present when I was in elementary school.

Elementary should be followed by school in this meaning. The complete expression is in elementary school, not in elementary.

× I when I was elementary school students, maybe the six years old, I practice the.

✓ When I was an elementary school student, maybe six years old, I practiced riding it.

The original sentence contains an unnecessary I at the beginning and does not have a clear sentence structure. Use one introductory when-clause followed by the main clause.

× I when I was elementary school students, maybe the six years old, I practice the.

✓ When I was an elementary school student, maybe six years old, I practiced riding it.

The singular countable noun student needs the article an because elementary begins with a vowel sound. The phrase the six years old is incorrect; say six years old without the article.

× I when I was elementary school students, maybe the six years old, I practice the.

✓ When I was an elementary school student, maybe six years old, I practiced riding it.

The question asks about a past experience, so practice must be changed to the past-tense form practiced.

× I when I was elementary school students, maybe the six years old, I practice the.

✓ When I was an elementary school student, maybe six years old, I practiced riding it.

The subject refers to one person, so student must be singular. Use an elementary school student, not elementary school students.

× Many people ride the bike at the daily, daily transportation tools such as a car and train and so on.

✓ Many people ride bikes for daily transportation, instead of using cars, trains, and so on.

For is the appropriate preposition when explaining the purpose of transportation. At the daily transportation tools is not a natural or grammatically correct phrase.

× Many people ride the bike at the daily, daily transportation tools such as a car and train and so on.

✓ Many people ride bikes for daily transportation, instead of using cars, trains, and so on.

The general plural noun bikes is more appropriate than the singular the bike. Cars and trains should also be plural because the speaker is referring to transportation in general.

× Many people ride the bike at the daily, daily transportation tools such as a car and train and so on.

✓ Many people ride bikes for daily transportation, instead of using cars, trains, and so on.

The definite article the is unnecessary when speaking about bikes in general. Use the plural noun bikes without an article.

× In particular, uh, the students for high school or the universal.

✓ In particular, high school and university students ride bikes.

The original expression is incomplete because it has no main verb. Adding ride bikes creates a complete sentence. High school and university students is also the correct noun phrase.