Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is direct and well developed, with relevant details about when you got the bike, its color, and how you used it. However, “I really had a dream to buy a bike” is unnatural; say “I had always dreamed of having a bike.” Also, replace “a blue color bike” with “a blue bike,” and use a linking word such as “I also” before the final detail. Avoid repeating “bike” too often by using “it” or “cycling.”

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it in Grade 2 because I had always dreamed of having one. It was a bright blue bike, and I rode it to school almost every day. I also shared it with my friends when we played in the neighborhood.

Suggestion: You give a clear opinion and provide relevant reasons and examples, but the answer is one very long sentence with several grammar and phrasing problems. Use a topic sentence followed by shorter supporting sentences. Replace “bikes are really very famous” with “bikes are very popular,” “to go to a short distance” with “for short trips,” and “to going to shops” with “going to nearby shops.” The population-related idea is unclear, so explain it more precisely—for example, bikes are convenient and practical in crowded cities. Use linking words such as “because,” “In addition,” and “For example.”

Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in crowded cities. Many people prefer them to cars for short trips because they are affordable and convenient. In addition, children often ride bikes to school or to nearby shops. For example, it is common to see students cycling around residential areas in the afternoon.

× It was like a blue color bike that I used to ride every day.

✓ It was a blue bike that I used to ride every day.

The noun color is unnecessary because blue can directly modify bike. Use the adjective blue before the noun bike.

× Since there is a large population, bikes are really very famous.

✓ Since there is a large population, bikes are very popular.

Famous usually describes a person or thing that is well known, whereas popular describes something that many people like or use. Therefore, popular is the appropriate adjective here.

× Since there is a large population bikes are really very famous people prefer bikes and two wheelers over cars to go to a short distance like a kilometer or two and children usually use bikes for going to school and to going to shops nearby.

✓ Since there is a large population, bikes are very popular. People prefer bikes and two-wheelers to cars for traveling short distances, such as a kilometer or two. Children also usually use bikes to go to school and nearby shops.

The original sentence contains several independent ideas joined together without appropriate punctuation or sentence boundaries. Divide the ideas into separate sentences to make the answer clearer and easier to understand.

× People prefer bikes and two wheelers over cars to go to a short distance like a kilometer or two.

✓ People prefer bikes and two-wheelers to cars for traveling short distances, such as a kilometer or two.

We normally say travel or go short distances, not go to a short distance. The preposition for is used before the purpose or activity: for traveling short distances.

× Children usually use bikes for going to school and to going to shops nearby.

✓ Children usually use bikes to go to school and to nearby shops.

The phrase to going is grammatically incorrect because the infinitive to must be followed by the base form of the verb: to go. Using to go in both parts also creates parallel structure.