Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer the question directly and avoid repeating the same idea, such as “when I was about,” “when I was a child,” and “in my childhood years.” Use correct past-tense grammar: “it was durable” and “you could do whatever you wanted.” Also, complete the final idea instead of ending with “it was also.” A clear structure would be: direct answer, bike description, and one specific reason you liked it.

Example: Yes, I had several bikes when I was a child. One of them was a Scott mountain bike, which was very durable and fun to ride. I also had a racing bike, and I used it when I wanted to cycle faster or ride with my friends.

Suggestion: You give a clear opinion and relevant reasons, but the answer contains repetition, awkward expressions, and some grammatical errors. Replace “there is a huge traffic” with “there is heavy traffic,” “the usage of cars is out of my mind” with “car use is extremely common,” and “there is no bike lanes too” with “there are no bike lanes either.” Use linking words such as “firstly” and “as a result,” and finish with a concise conclusion. Avoid repeating “in my country” and “so.”

Example: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, the roads are usually crowded with cars, and there are very few dedicated bike lanes. As a result, cycling can be dangerous, so most people prefer to drive or use public transportation.

× When I was about when I was a child in my childhood years, I had several bikes, one with brand name Scott and it was awesome because we're durable.

✓ When I was a child, I had several bikes. One had the brand name Scott, and it was awesome because it was durable.

The original sentence contains repeated time expressions and several clauses joined unclearly. Use one clear time expression and separate the ideas into two sentences.

× When I was about when I was a child in my childhood years, I had several bikes, one with brand name Scott and it was awesome because we're durable.

✓ When I was a child, I had several bikes. One had the brand name Scott, and it was awesome because it was durable.

The specific brand name requires the definite article the: the brand name Scott.

× When I was about when I was a child in my childhood years, I had several bikes, one with brand name Scott and it was awesome because we're durable.

✓ When I was a child, I had several bikes. One had the brand name Scott, and it was awesome because it was durable.

The answer describes a past childhood experience, so use the past-tense form was instead of the present form 're in we're.

× When I was about when I was a child in my childhood years, I had several bikes, one with brand name Scott and it was awesome because we're durable.

✓ When I was a child, I had several bikes. One had the brand name Scott, and it was awesome because it was durable.

The subject is one bike, not the speaker and another person. Therefore, use the singular pronoun it, not the pronoun we in we're.

× It was mountain bike and you could do whatever you want with it bike and I had another bike.

✓ It was a mountain bike, and you could do whatever you wanted with it. I had another bike.

A singular countable noun such as mountain bike needs an article. Use a before mountain bike.

× It was mountain bike and you could do whatever you want with it bike and I had another bike.

✓ It was a mountain bike, and you could do whatever you wanted with it. I had another bike.

The question asks about the past, so the modal expression should also refer to the past: could ... wanted, not could ... want.

× It was mountain bike and you could do whatever you want with it bike and I had another bike.

✓ It was a mountain bike, and you could do whatever you wanted with it. I had another bike.

The phrase with it bike is incorrectly structured, and too many ideas are joined together. Use with it and separate the second idea into a new sentence.

× It was racing bike and it was also.

✓ It was a racing bike, too.

Racing bike is a singular countable noun, so it requires the article a.

× It was racing bike and it was also.

✓ It was a racing bike, too.

The ending it was also is incomplete because also needs to modify a complete idea. The corrected sentence has a complete verb phrase and expresses the intended meaning clearly.

× The first reason is the traffic in my country there is a huge traffic.

✓ The first reason is that there is a lot of traffic in my country.

Traffic is normally an uncountable noun, so do not use it with the singular article a. Use a lot of traffic to express a large amount.

× The first reason is the traffic in my country there is a huge traffic.

✓ The first reason is that there is a lot of traffic in my country.

The clause after the phrase the first reason is needs the conjunction that to connect it correctly to the main clause.

× I mean the usage of cars is out of my mind mind and there is no bike lanes too so you can't ride bikes safely in my country so this light is not popular.

✓ I mean, car use is out of control, and there are no bike lanes, so you cannot ride bikes safely in my country. Therefore, bikes are not popular.

The plural noun bike lanes requires the plural there are, not there is. Also, the original sentence contains several clauses joined without clear structure, so separating them improves grammatical clarity.

× I mean the usage of cars is out of my mind mind and there is no bike lanes too so you can't ride bikes safely in my country so this light is not popular.

✓ I mean, car use is out of control, and there are no bike lanes, so you cannot ride bikes safely in my country. Therefore, bikes are not popular.

The original sentence contains repeated words and several independent ideas joined with so. Use clear connectors and separate the ideas into two sentences.