Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 내용은 질문에 직접 답했고, 형제에게 자전거를 배웠다는 구체적인 경험도 제시했습니다. 그러나 ‘take a bike’와 ‘taking the bike’는 부자연스러우므로 ‘ride a bike’ 또는 ‘riding my bike’를 사용해야 합니다. 또한 ‘learned how to bike’보다는 ‘learned how to ride a bike’가 더 자연스럽습니다. ‘because I was not that familiar with it’은 다소 어색하므로 ‘because I was still getting used to it’으로 바꾸는 것이 좋습니다. 마지막 문장은 ‘But eventually, I really enjoyed riding it’처럼 간결하게 연결하면 더 효과적입니다.

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it with my brothers, who taught me how to ride. I fell down a few times because I was still getting used to it, but eventually, I really enjoyed riding it.

Suggestion: 현재와 과거를 비교하여 답변한 점이 좋고, 공원에서 자전거를 타는 학생들을 본다는 구체적인 예도 효과적입니다. 다만 ‘it’은 bikes를 가리키므로 ‘they are much more popular these days’라고 해야 하며, ‘there were not that many people who had a bike’는 ‘not many people owned bikes’로 더 자연스럽게 표현할 수 있습니다. ‘students with bikes’는 자전거를 타는지 불분명하므로 ‘students riding bikes’가 적절합니다. 마지막에 건강, 여가 또는 친환경 교통수단이라는 이유를 한 문장 덧붙이면 내용과 어휘의 범위가 더 풍부해집니다.

Example: Yes, bikes are much more popular these days. When I was younger, not many people owned bikes, but now many children have their own bicycles. I often see students riding them in the park, partly because cycling is a healthy and environmentally friendly way to get around.

× Yes, I think it's much more popular these days.

✓ Yes, I think they're much more popular these days.

The noun bikes is plural, so it should be replaced by the plural pronoun they, not the singular pronoun it. The verb must also agree with the plural subject: they are, contracted as they're.