Part 1
Examiner
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidate
Uh, yes I had, I had one pink bag which I really like to decorated it. I decorated with uh, Hello Kitty stickers but it was really hard to drive the car uh, so my dad bought me extra 2 wheels to use it.
Examiner
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidate
No I don't. I don't think so as I my country countries population is really high so most people prefer to use public transportation in instead of bicycle bike. So no I don't think so.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Score: 58.0Suggestion: Soruyu doğrudan “Yes, I did” şeklinde cevaplayın ve “bag” ile “bike” kelimelerini karıştırmayın. “I really like to decorated it” yerine geçmiş zaman ve doğru fiil yapısını kullanmalısınız: “I really liked decorating it.” Bisiklet için “drive the car” değil, “ride the bike” ifadesi kullanılmalıdır. Cevabınızı geçmişteki bisikletiniz, üzerindeki çıkartmalar ve destek tekerlekleri hakkında 3–4 açık cümleyle düzenleyin; “because” ve “so” gibi bağlaçlarla ayrıntıları birbirine bağlayın.
Example: Yes, I did. I had a pink bicycle when I was a child, and I really enjoyed decorating it with Hello Kitty stickers. At first, it was difficult for me to ride, so my dad added two training wheels. They helped me learn how to balance and ride safely.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Score: 55.0Suggestion: Cevabınızda görüşünüzü net biçimde belirtiyorsunuz; ancak aynı fikri “No, I don’t” ve “So no, I don’t think so” diyerek tekrar ediyorsunuz. “My country countries population” yerine “my country has a large population” ve “instead of bicycle bike” yerine “instead of bicycles” kullanılmalıdır. Nüfus yoğunluğu ile bisiklet kullanımını daha mantıklı bağlamak için “because” veya “as a result” kullanın ve toplu taşımanın neden tercih edildiğini (örneğin daha hızlı veya daha pratik olması) spesifik bir ayrıntıyla açıklayın.
Example: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. Since the population is quite large, many people prefer using public transportation because it is faster and more convenient for commuting. However, bicycles are becoming more common among young people and in some smaller cities.
× I had one pink bag which I really like to decorated it.
✓ I had one pink bike that I really liked decorating.
Because the question asks about your childhood, the past tense is needed: liked, not like. The verb liked is followed by a gerund, so use decorating, not to decorated. The pronoun it is unnecessary because the relative pronoun that already refers to the bike.
× I had one pink bag which I really like to decorated it.
✓ I had one pink bike that I really liked decorating.
After liked, use the -ing form when describing an activity: liked decorating. Do not use to decorated. Also, do not add it because that already functions as the object of decorating.
× I decorated with Hello Kitty stickers.
✓ I decorated it with Hello Kitty stickers.
The verb decorate needs an object in this sentence. Use it to refer to the bike: I decorated it with Hello Kitty stickers.
× My dad bought me extra 2 wheels to use it.
✓ My dad bought me two extra wheels to use on the bike.
In natural English, small numbers are usually written as words, and the natural order is two extra wheels, not extra 2 wheels. The phrase use on the bike clearly explains where the wheels were used.
× My dad bought me extra 2 wheels to use it.
✓ My dad bought me two extra wheels to use on the bike.
It cannot refer naturally to wheels because wheels are plural. The correction avoids the incorrect singular pronoun and clearly identifies the bike as the object involved.
× I don't think so as I my country countries population is really high.
✓ I don't think so because my country's population is really high.
The original sentence contains several interrupted and incorrectly arranged parts: I my country countries population. Use a complete clause with a possessive noun: my country's population. Because introduces the reason more naturally here than as.
× Most people prefer to use public transportation in instead of bicycle bike.
✓ Most people prefer to use public transportation instead of bicycles.
The preposition in is unnecessary before instead of. The correct pattern is use A instead of B. Use bicycles as the plural noun when speaking about bikes in general.
× Most people prefer to use public transportation in instead of bicycle bike.
✓ Most people prefer to use public transportation instead of bicycles.
When referring to bikes in general, use the plural form bicycles, not the singular bicycle. The repeated word bike should also be removed.