Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer the question directly and keep your ideas in a clear order: mention the bike, describe your feelings, and explain what happened to it. Avoid repetition, such as “memory memory,” and check word choice: “wife” should probably be “bike,” while “governments” is not appropriate in this context. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood. You could connect your supporting details with words such as “Unfortunately” and “After that.”

Example: Yes, I had a pink bicycle when I was a child, and I absolutely loved it. Unfortunately, it was stolen, so losing it became a sad memory for me. After that, I still used bicycles regularly whenever I had the chance.

Suggestion: Use the plural subject “bikes” with “they are,” rather than “it’s.” Give a direct reason and develop it with a specific location or example. Avoid repeating “because,” “and,” and “use it regularly.” The phrase “because of it I am in a Mediterranean coast” is unclear; say “I live on Turkey’s Mediterranean coast” instead. Also, check the place name and use the correct form, such as “Mersin,” if that is what you mean.

Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in coastal cities such as Mersin, where I live. The weather is mild for most of the year, so many people use bicycles for exercise and short journeys. They are also a convenient way to get around the city.

× Yes, I had a pink bike when I was a child and I really liked my wife.

✓ Yes, I had a pink bike when I was a child, and I really liked it.

The pronoun my wife refers to a female person, but the student is talking about the bike. Use the pronoun it to refer to a singular inanimate noun such as bike.

× And it got stolen from me and I guess it was a sad memory memory for me.

✓ It was stolen, and I guess it was a sad memory for me.

The original sentence contains unnecessary repetition in memory memory and uses too many coordinated clauses. Dividing the ideas with a comma and conjunction makes the sentence clearer.

× But after that I used bicycles in governments today, in the past, I use them regularly.

✓ After that, I used bicycles regularly. In the past, I used them regularly, and I still use them today.

The phrase in the past requires the past-tense form used, not the present-tense form use. The revised version also separates past and present time references clearly.

× But after that I used bicycles in governments today, in the past, I use them regularly.

✓ After that, I used bicycles regularly. In the past, I used them regularly, and I still use them today.

When describing a habit that continues to the present, use the present tense still use. The phrase today indicates current time, so the present tense is appropriate.

× But after that I used bicycles in governments today, in the past, I use them regularly.

✓ After that, I used bicycles regularly. In the past, I used them regularly, and I still use them today.

This sentence combines several time expressions and ideas without a clear structure. Use separate sentences and connect the past and present ideas with and.

× Yes, I think it's really popular in my country because people use it often.

✓ Yes, I think they are really popular in my country because people use them often.

The subject bikes is plural, so use the plural pronoun they and the plural verb form are. The object pronoun must also be plural: them.

× Yes, I think it's really popular in my country because people use it often.

✓ Yes, I think they are really popular in my country because people use them often.

It and it refer to a singular noun, but the noun bikes is plural. Use they as the subject pronoun and them as the object pronoun.

× Because of it I am a Mediterranean coast of Turkey and and coastal city in Marson.

✓ I live on the Mediterranean coast of Turkey, in the coastal city of Mersin.

Use live on the coast, not am a coast, because a person lives in a location. The preposition in is appropriate before the name of a city. The repeated conjunction and has also been removed.

× Because of it I am a Mediterranean coast of Turkey and and coastal city in Marson so people use it regularly.

✓ I live on the Mediterranean coast of Turkey, in the coastal city of Mersin, so people use bikes regularly.

The original sentence has an incomplete and confusing structure, a repeated conjunction, and several ideas joined without proper punctuation. The revised sentence presents the location and result in a logical order.

× So people use it regularly.

✓ So people use bikes regularly.

The pronoun it is singular, but the meaning refers to bikes in general. Use the plural noun bikes or the plural pronoun them.