Part 1
Examiner
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidate
Of course I had. I usually rode a bike when I was a child. I often, uh, rode it around the community I live, I lived in.
Examiner
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidate
I don't think so. People in our country seldom ride the bike because public transport. Transport options are pretty convenient in my country, so they usually go to work by subway or by train.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Score: 72.0Suggestion: 回答直接,但“I usually rode a bike when I was a child”和“I often rode it...”意思重复,可以合并以提高表达效率。注意使用过去时和正确的定语从句:“the community where I lived”或“the neighborhood I lived in”。尽量避免“uh”和明显的自我修改;可以补充一个具体活动或感受,使答案更丰富。
Example: Yes, I did. I often rode my bike around the neighborhood where I lived, especially after school. It was a fun way to spend time outdoors and meet my friends.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Score: 68.0Suggestion: 观点明确,也给出了公共交通便利这一原因,但“because public transport”语法不完整,应改为“because public transport is convenient”或“because of the convenient public transport”。“ride the bike”在泛指自行车时不自然,建议使用“ride bikes”或“cycle”。另外,可以说明自行车在某些城市或特定人群中仍然受欢迎,这样答案会更准确、更有层次。
Example: I wouldn’t say bikes are very popular for commuting in my country. Public transport is convenient and affordable, so many people take the subway or train to work. However, bikes are still popular for exercise and short trips, especially in smaller cities.
× I often, uh, rode it around the community I live, I lived in.
✓ I often rode it around the community I lived in.
主句使用过去时“rode”,因为描述的是童年时期的经历,所以定语从句也应使用过去时“lived”,不能使用现在时“live”。同时,口语中的“uh”和自我修正不属于语法错误,因此在正式表达中可以删除。
× People in our country seldom ride the bike because public transport.
✓ People in our country seldom ride bikes because of public transport.
“because”后面通常接完整的句子,而“public transport”是名词短语,因此应使用“because of”。另外,泛指自行车时通常使用复数“bikes”,而不是特指的“the bike”。