Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer the question directly and use the correct word “bikes,” not “bites.” The phrase “whenever he saw the brand new” is incomplete and unclear; explain why your father bought new bikes, such as because you outgrew them or they became damaged. Use a clearer linking structure, such as “because” or “as a result,” and avoid repeating “bike” unnecessarily.

Example: Yes, I had several bikes when I was a child, and my parents bought most of them for me. They wanted me to become more independent and travel around town on my own. My dad sometimes bought me a new one when I outgrew my old bike or when it was damaged.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, bikes are very popular in Vietnam.” Correct the sentence structure in “Vietnam is people love riding bikes” and use “older people” instead of “people who are old.” Also, say “recreational time,” “bikes are good for your health,” and “many people use them” rather than “adopt them.” Add a specific reason or example, such as avoiding traffic, exercising, or using bicycles in rural areas.

Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Vietnam, especially among children and older people. Children often ride them for fun, while adults use them to exercise or travel short distances. In addition, bicycles are convenient because they are inexpensive and can help people avoid traffic in crowded cities.

× Vietnam is people love riding bikes, especially people who are old or children who are learning to ride a bike as a fun activity in their creational time.

✓ In Vietnam, people love riding bikes, especially older people and children who are learning to ride a bike as a fun activity in their recreational time.

The original sentence incorrectly joins 'Vietnam is' with the clause 'people love riding bikes.' 'Vietnam' is a place, while 'people love riding bikes' is a complete clause, so they need to be connected with a suitable structure. Begin with the prepositional phrase 'In Vietnam' instead. Also, use the parallel noun phrases 'older people and children' rather than 'people who are old or children.'

× And I think riding a bice also very good for the health, so many people adopt them.

✓ And I think riding a bike is also very good for your health, so many people ride bikes.

The original sentence is missing the linking verb 'is' after the subject 'riding a bike.' A complete sentence needs a verb. Also, 'bike' is the correct spelling, and 'your health' is the natural expression when discussing health in general. Use 'ride bikes' instead of 'adopt them' because people ride bikes; they do not usually adopt them.

× They wanted me to travel around town by myself, so my dad usually bought me a new bike whenever he saw the brand new.

✓ They wanted me to travel around town by myself, so my dad usually bought me a new bike whenever he saw a brand-new one.

The phrase 'the brand new' is incomplete because 'brand-new' is an adjective and cannot function as a noun by itself in this sentence. Add the pronoun 'one' to replace 'bike' and use the indefinite article 'a' because this refers to any new bike he saw. 'Brand-new' should be hyphenated when it comes before a noun or the pronoun 'one'.