Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer directly and describe the bike using natural adjective and noun combinations. Replace “shine bright” with “shiny and bright,” and use the past tense consistently by changing “has” to “had.” Also, “four wheels” usually describes a tricycle or a bike with training wheels, so clarify this point.

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was five years old. It was a small, shiny red bike with training wheels, so I could keep my balance. I enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and then support it with a specific reason and a prediction. Use “my country” rather than “my countries,” and replace “the great path for biking” with “a good cycling infrastructure” or “dedicated bike lanes.” Divide the long sentence with linking words such as “because,” “however,” and “as a result,” and use “they will become” for a more natural future prediction.

Example: Bikes are not very popular in my country because many cities lack dedicated bike lanes and safe cycling routes. However, the government is gradually improving the infrastructure and adding more bike paths. As a result, I think cycling will become more popular in the future.

× It was a shine bright that has four wheels.

✓ It was a shiny bike that had four wheels.

Shine is a verb or noun, but shiny is the adjective needed to describe the bike. The original sentence also needs the noun bike after the adjective. Use an adjective to describe a noun, such as a shiny bike.

× It was a shine bright that has four wheels.

✓ It was a shiny bike that had four wheels.

The question asks about the speaker's childhood, so the description should remain in the past tense. Has should change to had because the bike had four wheels at that time. Keep verbs consistent with the past-time context.

× Bikes are not popular in my countries because my country didn't support the great path for biking that much but they are developing so I guess in the future it would be more popular.

✓ Bikes are not popular in my country because my country does not support bike paths very much, but bike infrastructure is developing, so I guess they will be more popular in the future.

The speaker refers to one country, so countries must be changed to the singular form country. Check whether the noun refers to one item or more than one item before choosing a singular or plural form.

× Bikes are not popular in my countries because my country didn't support the great path for biking that much but they are developing so I guess in the future it would be more popular.

✓ Bikes are not popular in my country because my country does not support bike paths very much, but bike infrastructure is developing, so I guess they will be more popular in the future.

The statement describes the current situation in the country, so the present tense does not support is more appropriate than the past form did not support. Use the present tense for facts and conditions that are true now.

× Bikes are not popular in my countries because my country didn't support the great path for biking that much but they are developing so I guess in the future it would be more popular.

✓ Bikes are not popular in my country because my country does not support bike paths very much, but bike infrastructure is developing, so I guess they will be more popular in the future.

The phrase in the future refers to a prediction, so will be more popular is the appropriate future form. Would generally expresses a conditional or reported future, which is not needed here.

× Bikes are not popular in my countries because my country didn't support the great path for biking that much but they are developing so I guess in the future it would be more popular.

✓ Bikes are not popular in my country because my country does not support bike paths very much, but bike infrastructure is developing, so I guess bikes will be more popular in the future.

They is unclear because it could refer to bikes, the country, or bike paths. Use the specific noun bikes instead of an unclear pronoun. Clear pronoun references make the meaning easier to understand.