Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer directly in the past tense: say whether you had a bike, then add one clear memory. Use “I had a bike when I was a child” instead of “I have,” and use past-tense verbs such as “fell” and “worried.” Avoid incomplete phrases such as “because I’m kinda” and organize the answer with a linking word like “Unfortunately” or “However.”

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I remember falling off it the first time I rode it, and my family became very worried. However, I soon learned how to ride it confidently.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion first and support it with one specific example. Clarify the unclear phrase “startup in Thail” by referring to bike-sharing projects or rental schemes in Thailand. Avoid repetition such as “park park” and do not end with “but.” Use linking words such as “For example” and explain that people use bikes for both exercise and transportation.

Example: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Thailand. For example, several cities have bike-sharing schemes where people can rent bicycles and leave them at different stations. Many people use bikes for exercise, while others use them for short journeys.

× I have when I'm a little child

✓ I had one when I was a little child.

The question asks about a past experience, so use the past-tense forms had and was instead of the present-tense forms have and am.

× I have bike

✓ I had a bike.

The singular countable noun bike needs the indefinite article a when it is mentioned for the first time.

× the first time I remember it last time I fall

✓ The first time I remember riding it was when I fell.

The event happened in the past, so fall must be changed to the past-tense form fell. The phrase was when makes the time expression grammatically complete.

× I have bike and the first time I remember it last time I fall

✓ I had a bike, and the first time I remember riding it was when I fell.

The original sentence joins several ideas without clearly showing their relationship. Using and after a comma connects the two complete ideas more clearly.

× because I'm kinda

✓ because I was kind of worried.

The original phrase is incomplete because kind of needs to describe an adjective or state. Adding worried creates a complete clause. Since the story is in the past, was is more appropriate than am.

× everyone's like, umm, I'm worrying about me

✓ Everyone was like, Umm, I'm worried about him.

The reporting verb should be in the past tense because the student is describing a past event, so is like becomes was like. Worried is the correct adjective for describing a person's concern; worrying usually describes something that causes concern.

× startup in Thail have project a lot

✓ Start-ups in Thailand have many projects.

The plural subject start-ups correctly matches have. Projects must also be plural because the sentence refers to more than one project. Thailand is the correct spelling of the country name.

× startup in Thail have project a lot

✓ Start-ups in Thailand have many projects.

Many is used with plural countable nouns such as projects. The phrase project a lot is not a correct way to express a large number of projects.

× a lot of park have bikes

✓ A lot of parks have bikes.

The noun after a lot of must be plural when referring to multiple parks, so park becomes parks. The plural subject parks correctly takes have.

× Yes, because I saw like startup in Thail have project a lot and just like enter it and park park and a lot of park have bikes but everyone is doing it for exercise but

✓ Yes, because I have seen many start-ups in Thailand launch projects involving bikes, and many parks have bikes that people use for exercise.

The original answer contains several incomplete and unclear phrases joined together. Organizing the ideas into one complete sentence with clear verbs and a relative clause makes the answer easier to understand.