Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid repeating the same idea in two sentences. Add one specific supporting detail, such as when you received the bike, how often you used it, or where you rode it. A natural linking phrase such as “I remember that…” can help you develop the answer.

Example: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was about eight, and I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and then explain why bikes are popular with specific details. Avoid repetition such as “Yes, I do. I do think” and replace “the phenomenal that I saw” with “one common trend I noticed.” The phrase “when your age is like very close to 8” should be changed to “when children are around eight years old.” Use linking words such as “for example” and “because” to make your explanation more coherent.

Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children. For example, many parents encourage their children to learn to ride when they are around eight years old because cycling is a fun and healthy activity. In addition, some people use bikes to travel short distances and avoid traffic.

× Umm the phenomenal that I saw when I was a child is when you when your age is like very close to 8 people usually pushing you to learn how to ride a bike.

✓ Umm, the phenomenon that I saw when I was a child was that when you were close to eight years old, people usually pushed you to learn how to ride a bike.

Phenomenal is an adjective, but the sentence needs a noun referring to an event or observed fact. Use phenomenon instead.

× Umm the phenomenal that I saw when I was a child is when you when your age is like very close to 8 people usually pushing you to learn how to ride a bike.

✓ Umm, the phenomenon that I saw when I was a child was that when you were close to eight years old, people usually pushed you to learn how to ride a bike.

The student is describing a situation in the past, so use the past-tense forms was, were, and pushed instead of is, is, and pushing.

× Umm the phenomenal that I saw when I was a child is when you when your age is like very close to 8 people usually pushing you to learn how to ride a bike.

✓ Umm, the phenomenon that I saw when I was a child was that when you were close to eight years old, people usually pushed you to learn how to ride a bike.

Usually describes a repeated or habitual action and should be followed by the simple past verb pushed in this past-time context, not the -ing form pushing.

× Umm the phenomenal that I saw when I was a child is when you when your age is like very close to 8 people usually pushing you to learn how to ride a bike.

✓ Umm, the phenomenon that I saw when I was a child was that when you were close to eight years old, people usually pushed you to learn how to ride a bike.

The original sentence contains an incomplete and repeated structure: when you when your age is. Use the clearer pattern the phenomenon was that followed by a complete clause. Avoid repeating when, and express age with you were close to eight years old.