Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer the question directly and make your meaning clear. The phrase “when I was 77” is confusing and may be a pronunciation error; use a clear age, such as “seven.” Use the past tense consistently: “I started riding” and “I first got a bike.” Add one specific detail, such as where you rode it or who gave it to you. Avoid fillers such as “uh” and “umm,” and keep the answer to two or three connected sentences.

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was about seven years old. I started riding it in my neighborhood, and I often went cycling with my friends after school.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating the same idea. Use “bikes” or “cycling,” not “Bex,” and connect the supporting idea with a linking word such as “because.” You could explain why bikes are popular by mentioning health, convenience, or traffic. Also, say “Many young and older people” rather than “so many younger people and older people.”

Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. Many young and older people cycle because it is affordable, healthy, and convenient for avoiding traffic.

× I start a longer 2 umm sicko.

✓ I started riding a bicycle.

Because the student is describing a childhood experience in the past, the past-tense form started is required instead of the present-tense form start. Use the past tense when describing completed events in the past.

× So when I have first back maybe.

✓ So, when I first got a bike, maybe.

The event of getting the bike happened in the past, so have should not be used here. The past-tense phrase first got correctly describes the completed past event. When talking about past experiences, use past-tense verbs such as got, bought, or received.

× I think in my country Bex is very popular.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in my country.

The student is talking about bicycles in general, so the plural noun bikes is needed. The plural subject bikes must be followed by the plural verb are. Use a plural noun when referring to a whole category of things.

× So many younger people and older people.

✓ There are many younger and older people who ride bikes.

The original sentence is a fragment because it does not contain a main verb. Adding there are creates a complete sentence. Make sure every sentence has a subject and a verb.