Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer directly in the past tense: say “Yes, I did have a bike.” Use “I remember” instead of “From what I remembered,” and keep the verb tense consistent by saying “It was red” and “it had a Lightning McQueen sticker.” Avoid fillers such as “uh,” and correct “a a” to “a.” Your answer has relevant specific details, but it could be more natural and fluent.

Example: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. I remember that my parents gave it to me for my fourth birthday. It was red and had a Lightning McQueen sticker on it, so I was really excited to ride it around my neighborhood.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear topic sentence, then support your opinion with two or three organized reasons. Correct “a lot of bikes in the near the sidewalks” to “many bikes parked near the sidewalks,” “specific lanes prepared for bikers” to “dedicated bike lanes,” and “then went to” to “ride to different places.” Use consistent present tense and finish the answer; the current response is incomplete and contains several grammatical errors. Linking words such as “Moreover” or “For example” would make the ideas more coherent.

Example: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people use them for exercise and short trips, and some cities have dedicated bike lanes. Moreover, bike-sharing services are available in several town centers, so people can rent a bike and ride to different places easily.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

The question asks about a past time, so the answer should use the past form did have, not the present form do have. Use did or had when describing past experiences.

× From what I remembered, my parents bought me the bike for my, uh, birthday as a present.

✓ As far as I remember, my parents bought me a bike for my birthday as a present.

A bike is being mentioned for the first time, so the indefinite article a is more appropriate than the. The phrase as far as I remember is also the natural expression for recalling information. The phrase for my birthday is sufficient; as a present is grammatically possible but slightly repetitive.

× The color is red and it has a a Lightning McQueen sticker on it.

✓ The color is red, and it has a Lightning McQueen sticker on it.

The article a is repeated before Lightning McQueen sticker. Only one indefinite article is needed before a singular countable noun.

× As you can see there's a lot of bikes in the near the sidewalks, the lanes there are even specific lanes prepared for bikers and in some points at the town you can rent a bike and then went to

✓ As you can see, there are a lot of bikes near the sidewalks, and there are even specific lanes prepared for bikers. In some parts of town, you can rent a bike and then go wherever you want.

Because bikes and specific lanes are plural, use there are rather than there is or there's. Use there is with a singular noun and there are with a plural noun.

× As you can see there's a lot of bikes in the near the sidewalks, the lanes there are even specific lanes prepared for bikers and in some points at the town you can rent a bike and then went to

✓ As you can see, there are a lot of bikes near the sidewalks, and there are even specific lanes prepared for bikers. In some parts of town, you can rent a bike and then go wherever you want.

Near does not require the preposition in, so say near the sidewalks, not in the near the sidewalks. Also, use in some parts of town rather than at some points at the town when referring to locations within a town.

× In some points at the town you can rent a bike and then went to

✓ In some parts of town, you can rent a bike and then go wherever you want.

After the modal verb can, use the base form of the verb. Therefore, use go rather than went. The same rule applies to other modal verbs, such as can go, should go, and will go.

× As you can see there's a lot of bikes in the near the sidewalks, the lanes there are even specific lanes prepared for bikers and in some points at the town you can rent a bike and then went to

✓ As you can see, there are a lot of bikes near the sidewalks, and there are even specific lanes prepared for bikers. In some parts of town, you can rent a bike and then go wherever you want.

The original sentence joins several complete ideas without clear punctuation or conjunctions. Divide the ideas into two sentences and use and to connect closely related information. Also, the original ending is incomplete, so a destination or complete phrase is needed after go.