Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer directly with a grammatically complete topic sentence: “Yes, I did.” Avoid repeating “my father” and correct the verb forms: “I didn’t buy one,” “when I was a child,” and “when I came first.” Use a linking word such as “because” only once, and clearly explain what the competition was if necessary. Keep the answer natural and within three or four sentences.

Example: Yes, I did. I got my first bicycle from my father when I was a child because I came first in a school sports competition. I was very proud of it and rode it around my neighborhood every weekend.

Suggestion: State your opinion clearly and use accurate vocabulary: say “bicycles are not the most popular means of transportation,” not “transportation team.” Avoid repeating “bicycle” and “there is no special.” Use “bike lanes” instead of “special line in the road,” and organize the reason with “because” or “as a result.” Add a specific comparison, such as the popularity of motorcycles, to make your answer more effective.

Example: No, I don’t think bicycles are very popular in Indonesia. Motorcycles are much more common because they are faster and more convenient for long journeys. In addition, many roads do not have dedicated bike lanes, so cycling can be unsafe. As a result, most people prefer to use motorcycles or cars.

× Yes, I didn't buy when I was kid.

✓ Yes, I didn't buy it when I was a kid.

The singular countable noun kid requires the indefinite article a. The pronoun it is also needed after buy because the object being bought must be mentioned.

× Yes, I didn't buy when I was kid.

✓ Yes, I didn't buy it when I was a kid.

The sentence is incomplete because buy normally needs an object in this context. Use buy it to clarify what was not purchased.

× I got my first bicycle from my father because my father gave it to me as a reward when I or when I be #1 in Meta Olympics.

✓ I got my first bicycle from my father because he gave it to me as a reward when I was number one in the Meta Olympics.

The question refers to a childhood experience, so the past tense was is required instead of be. Use was with the past-time expression when I was number one.

× I got my first bicycle from my father because my father gave it to me as a reward when I or when I be #1 in Meta Olympics.

✓ I got my first bicycle from my father because he gave it to me as a reward when I was number one in the Meta Olympics.

The phrase I or when I is incomplete and creates an incorrect sentence structure. Remove the repeated and unfinished words and use one complete when-clause.

× In my perspective, bicycle it's not the most popular transportation team in the country because bicycle it's not appropriate for my country, Indonesia, there is no special, there is no special in line in the road for bicycles, so it's totally not safe for riders.

✓ From my perspective, bicycles are not the most popular means of transportation in the country because they are not appropriate for Indonesia.

The natural preposition is from in the expression from my perspective. In my perspective is not normally used to introduce an opinion.

× In my perspective, bicycle it's not the most popular transportation team in the country because bicycle it's not appropriate for my country, Indonesia, there is no special, there is no special in line in the road for bicycles, so it's totally not safe for riders.

✓ From my perspective, bicycles are not the most popular means of transportation in the country because they are not appropriate for Indonesia.

Bicycles refers to bicycles in general, so the plural form is needed. The plural subject also requires the plural verb are and the pronoun they.

× In my perspective, bicycle it's not the most popular transportation team in the country because bicycle it's not appropriate for my country, Indonesia, there is no special, there is no special in line in the road for bicycles, so it's totally not safe for riders.

✓ There are no special lanes on the roads for bicycles, so riding is not safe for riders.

The noun lanes is plural, so the correct there-be construction is there are, not there is. Avoid repeating the unfinished phrase there is no special.

× In my perspective, bicycle it's not the most popular transportation team in the country because bicycle it's not appropriate for my country, Indonesia, there is no special, there is no special in line in the road for bicycles, so it's totally not safe for riders.

✓ There are no special lanes on the roads for bicycles, so riding is not safe for riders.

Use on with roads and lanes because these expressions describe locations on a road surface. The phrase in the road is not appropriate in this context.

× In my perspective, bicycle it's not the most popular transportation team in the country because bicycle it's not appropriate for my country, Indonesia, there is no special, there is no special in line in the road for bicycles, so it's totally not safe for riders.

✓ From my perspective, bicycles are not the most popular means of transportation in Indonesia because they are not appropriate for the country. There are no special lanes on the roads for bicycles, so riding is not safe.

The original answer contains repeated words, two independent ideas joined only by commas, and an incomplete phrase. Divide the answer into complete sentences and connect each idea clearly.