Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer the question directly, then explain how the bike made you feel and give a specific example. Improve tense consistency by using the past tense throughout: say “I felt,” “I needed,” and “I could go.” Avoid unclear phrases such as “when I have a park” and “go with myself”; use “when I went to the park” and “go by myself.” Also, reduce repetition and connect your ideas more naturally with “because” or “so.”

Example: Yes, I did. When I was five, my parents gave me a bike, and I felt very independent because I could ride to the park by myself. Before that, I usually depended on my parents to drive me to school or other places. I really enjoyed the freedom of riding my bike.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear answer and support it with two specific reasons. Correct the grammar in “many of people” to “many people,” “the oldest” to “older people,” “it is also benefit” to “it also benefits,” and “motorbike” to “motorbikes.” Use linking words such as “Moreover” or “As a result” to make the ideas flow more smoothly. You could also add a concrete example, such as people cycling to work or in local parks.

Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities. Many people, including older residents, cycle regularly because it helps them stay healthy. Moreover, cycling is more environmentally friendly than driving cars or riding motorbikes. For example, I often see people using bicycles to commute to work or exercise in local parks.

× because when everyone is nearby I just need them to help me

✓ because when everyone was nearby, I just needed them to help me

The speaker is describing a childhood experience in the past, so the verbs should be in the past tense: was and needed. Keep the tense consistent throughout a past-time story.

× I felt really independent with riding a bike by myself

✓ I felt really independent while riding a bike by myself

While is more appropriate than with before an -ing phrase when describing an activity happening at the same time. You can also say, I felt really independent when I rode a bike by myself.

× to drive me to go to school with car

✓ to drive me to school by car

The correct preposition for traveling by car is by, not with. Also, drive me to school is the natural structure; go is unnecessary after drive me.

× But when I have a park

✓ But when I was at a park

The answer refers to a situation in the past, so have should not be used in the present tense. Use was at a park to describe your location in the past.

× I can go with myself

✓ I could go by myself

By myself is the correct phrase meaning alone or without help. With myself is not used to express this meaning. Could is also suitable because the answer describes past ability.

× Many of people live in my neighborhood think that cycling is good for their health

✓ Many people who live in my neighborhood think that cycling is good for their health

Many is used directly before a plural countable noun, so of is unnecessary: many people. The relative pronoun who is needed to connect live in my neighborhood with think.

× especially for the oldest

✓ especially for older people

The oldest is a superlative form and normally identifies one person or group as the oldest among all others. Here, the intended meaning is older people in general, so use the comparative adjective older.

× it is also benefit the environment more than cars or motorbike

✓ it also benefits the environment more than cars or motorbikes

When it is the subject in the present tense, the verb needs the third-person singular ending: benefits. The phrase is also benefit is grammatically incorrect. Motorbikes should be plural because the sentence compares cycling with cars and motorbikes in general.

× more than cars or motorbike

✓ more than cars or motorbikes

Cars is plural, so motorbike should also be plural when referring to motorbikes as a general category. Use motorbikes rather than the singular motorbike.