Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer directly in the past tense: say that you had a bike, then explain who gave it to you and how you used it. Correct the grammar in “I have been bought,” “when I'm,” and “I use it I used to ride it.” Use “when I was two,” “my father bought me,” and “I used to ride it.” Also, avoid repeating ideas and use a clearer sentence structure with a linking word such as “and.”

Example: Yes, I had a pink bicycle when I was two years old. My father bought it for me, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood. I sometimes rode it to school as well.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear opinion, such as “Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country.” Then support it with a specific reason or example. Use “neighborhood” rather than “our neighbor,” and replace the awkward phrase “a long day of working and studying” with “a long day at work or school.” Avoid ending with “and yeah,” and use a linking word such as “especially” or “because.”

Example: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people. Many people ride them around their neighborhoods to relax and relieve stress after a long day at work or school. They are also a convenient and environmentally friendly way to travel short distances.

× Actually yes, I have been bought a pink bicycle by my father when I'm a two gritter and I use it I used to ride it around my neighbour and when I go to school.

✓ Actually, yes. My father bought me a pink bicycle when I was two, and I used to ride it around my neighbourhood and to school.

The sentence incorrectly uses the passive structure have been bought. A person can be bought, but an object should be expressed with an active structure such as my father bought me a bicycle. Use the active voice when explaining who gave or purchased something.

× Actually yes, I have been bought a pink bicycle by my father when I'm a two gritter and I use it I used to ride it around my neighbour and when I go to school.

✓ Actually, yes. My father bought me a pink bicycle when I was two, and I used to ride it around my neighbourhood and to school.

The question asks about a childhood experience, so the answer should mainly use the past tense. Change present forms such as I am and I go to past forms such as I was and I went, or use used to for repeated past actions. In this correction, used to ride describes a regular activity in the past.

× Actually yes, I have been bought a pink bicycle by my father when I'm a two gritter and I use it I used to ride it around my neighbour and when I go to school.

✓ Actually, yes. My father bought me a pink bicycle when I was two, and I used to ride it around my neighbourhood and to school.

The expression a two gritter is not a correct adjective phrase. To describe a person’s age, use was two or was two years old. For example, My father bought me a bicycle when I was two years old.

× Actually yes, I have been bought a pink bicycle by my father when I'm a two gritter and I use it I used to ride it around my neighbour and when I go to school.

✓ Actually, yes. My father bought me a pink bicycle when I was two, and I used to ride it around my neighbourhood and to school.

The original answer contains several ideas joined together without proper punctuation or a clear conjunction. It also repeats the idea in I use it I used to ride it. Separate the opening response from the main sentence and connect the remaining ideas clearly.

× I think yes people often ride bikes around our neighbour to relax and relieve stress after a long day of working and studying and yeah.

✓ I think so. People often ride bikes around our neighbourhood to relax and relieve stress after a long day of working and studying.

The original response is a run-on sentence because several ideas are connected without appropriate punctuation. I think so is a more natural introductory expression, and the final and yeah is unnecessary. Use a full stop after the introductory phrase and then state the reason clearly.