Part 1
Examiner
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidate
Yes, I did. I receive a bicycle as a birthday present when I was 10 and my father taught me how to ride it a lot. Cycling because it gave me freedom and I often rode around the neighborhood with friends after school.
Examiner
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidate
Yes, I think bikes are really popular in my country. It's common to see both teenager and adults on cycling, along the streets and sometimes near my workplace, sometimes on the weekends by the lake. I think for many people it's a way to relax and also a way to commute from a point to another.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Score: 68.0Suggestion: 回答基本直接,也提供了时间、人物和活动等细节,内容比较完整。但需要注意过去时:将“receive”改为“received”;“taught me how to ride it a lot”表达不自然,可以改为“spent a lot of time teaching me how to ride it”。第三句是句子片段,应改为“I enjoyed cycling because...”。此外,可以使用“After that”或“so”连接细节,使答案更连贯。
Example: Yes, I did. I received a bicycle as a birthday present when I was ten, and my father spent a lot of time teaching me how to ride it. I really enjoyed cycling because it gave me a sense of freedom. After that, I often rode around the neighborhood with my friends after school.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Score: 70.0Suggestion: 答案观点明确,并且说明了骑自行车的两个原因:放松和通勤,内容方向很好。但要改进词汇和语法准确性:“both teenager and adults”应改为“both teenagers and adults”;“on cycling”应改为“cycling”或“riding bikes”;“from a point to another”不自然,应改为“from one place to another”。第二句中“sometimes”重复,可以重新组织地点和时间信息,并使用“Besides”或“while”增强衔接。
Example: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. It is common to see both teenagers and adults riding them on the streets, especially at weekends near lakes and parks. Many people use bikes to relax, while others ride them to commute from one place to another. They are also a convenient way to avoid traffic.
× Yes, I did. I receive a bicycle as a birthday present when I was 10 and my father taught me how to ride it a lot.
✓ Yes, I did. I received a bicycle as a birthday present when I was 10, and my father taught me how to ride it.
这里描述的是童年时已经发生的事情,应该使用一般过去时。receive 的过去式是 received。另一个分句中的 taught 已经是过去式。
× Cycling because it gave me freedom and I often rode around the neighborhood with friends after school.
✓ I enjoyed cycling because it gave me freedom, and I often rode around the neighborhood with friends after school.
原句以 Cycling 开头,但后面直接接 because,缺少主语和谓语,因此是句子残缺。可以补充主语 I 和谓语 enjoyed,使句子结构完整。
× It's common to see both teenager and adults on cycling, along the streets and sometimes near my workplace, sometimes on the weekends by the lake.
✓ It's common to see both teenagers and adults cycling along the streets, sometimes near my workplace and sometimes by the lake on weekends.
both 后面连接两个并列名词时,两个名词都应该使用复数形式,所以 teenager 应改为 teenagers。
× It's common to see both teenager and adults on cycling, along the streets and sometimes near my workplace, sometimes on the weekends by the lake.
✓ It's common to see both teenagers and adults cycling along the streets, sometimes near my workplace and sometimes by the lake on weekends.
see 后面可以接宾语加现在分词,表示“看到某人正在做某事”,所以应使用 cycling,而不是 on cycling。表示沿着街道骑车时,使用 along the streets。
× I think for many people it's a way to relax and also a way to commute from a point to another.
✓ I think for many people it's a way to relax and also a way to commute from one place to another.
表示“从一个地方到另一个地方”时,英语使用固定结构 from one place to another。不能使用 from a point to another。place 比 point 更适合表示通勤地点。