Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer the question directly in the first sentence and avoid repeated words such as “I need” and “to buy.” Use the past tense consistently: “I didn’t have,” “my family rented,” and “I used.” Also, “bike” should not be pronounced or written as “pie,” and “an old bike” is grammatically correct. Add one clear reason or detail to make the answer more complete, but keep it to no more than three sentences.

Example: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family lived quite far from the shops, so we didn’t buy one for me. When I needed a bike, I usually rented one.

Suggestion: State your opinion clearly at the beginning: “No, bikes are not very popular in my country.” Use accurate vocabulary and grammar: say “bikes are not very common,” not “the bike is not famous,” and say “people use other vehicles,” not “bikes are used on other vehicles.” Avoid repetition such as “another another” and give a specific reason, such as convenience, distance, or public transportation. Use a linking word such as “because” or “instead.”

Example: No, bikes are not very popular in my country. Many people prefer cars, motorbikes, or buses because they are more convenient for long distances. In addition, public transportation is widely available, so people do not rely on bicycles very much.

× So what I actually when I was a child, I don't I didn't have have a old bike for me because my house is too far to buy from to buy a new pie for me and I need and I need to rent this by.

✓ Actually, when I was a child, I did not have a bike because my house was too far from a bike shop to buy a new bike, so I needed to rent one.

The original sentence contains repeated words, incomplete clauses, and several ideas joined in an unclear structure. Use a clear sentence pattern: subject + verb + complement. Avoid repeating words such as I do not, I did not and have have.

× So what I actually when I was a child, I don't I didn't have have a old bike for me because my house is too far to buy from to buy a new pie for me and I need and I need to rent this by.

✓ Actually, when I was a child, I did not have a bike because my house was too far from a bike shop to buy a new bike, so I needed to rent one.

The question asks about a past period, when I was a child, so past tense is needed throughout. Change is to was and need to needed.

× So what I actually when I was a child, I don't I didn't have have a old bike for me because my house is too far to buy from to buy a new pie for me and I need and I need to rent this by.

✓ Actually, when I was a child, I did not have an old bike because my house was too far from a bike shop to buy a new bike, so I needed to rent one.

Use an before a word beginning with a vowel sound. Therefore, a old is incorrect; an old is correct.

× So what I actually when I was a child, I don't I didn't have have a old bike for me because my house is too far to buy from to buy a new pie for me and I need and I need to rent this by.

✓ Actually, when I was a child, I did not have a bike because my house was too far from a bike shop to buy a new bike, so I needed to rent one.

When describing distance in relation to a place, use too far from, not too far to buy from. The phrase too far from a bike shop clearly identifies the place.

× So what I actually when I was a child, I don't I didn't have have a old bike for me because my house is too far to buy from to buy a new pie for me and I need and I need to rent this by.

✓ Actually, when I was a child, I did not have a bike because my house was too far from a bike shop to buy a new bike, so I needed to rent one.

Use one to refer back to a singular countable noun such as bike. This is more natural and grammatically appropriate than this bike in this context.

× I'm the buy is not our famous in my country because they are usually used on another another vehicles like a car, motorbike or bus. So this bike is not really.

✓ I think bikes are not very popular in my country because people usually use other vehicles, such as cars, motorbikes, or buses. Therefore, bikes are not very common.

The original sentence has an unclear opening and an incomplete final clause. Use I think bikes are not very popular as the main clause, and make the reason clause complete with a subject and a verb.

× I'm the buy is not our famous in my country because they are usually used on another another vehicles like a car, motorbike or bus. So this bike is not really.

✓ I think bikes are not very popular in my country because people usually use other vehicles, such as cars, motorbikes, or buses. Therefore, bikes are not very common.

Famous means well known, whereas popular is the appropriate adjective for something that many people like or use. Also, not really is incomplete here; not very common clearly expresses the intended meaning.

× I'm the buy is not our famous in my country because they are usually used on another another vehicles like a car, motorbike or bus. So this bike is not really.

✓ I think bikes are not very popular in my country because people usually use other vehicles, such as cars, motorbikes, or buses. Therefore, bikes are not very common.

Another is used before a singular countable noun, as in another vehicle. Because vehicles is plural, use other vehicles. Do not repeat another.

× I'm the buy is not our famous in my country because they are usually used on another another vehicles like a car, motorbike or bus. So this bike is not really.

✓ I think bikes are not very popular in my country because people usually use other vehicles, such as cars, motorbikes, or buses. Therefore, bikes are not very common.

The plural subject bikes requires the plural verb are. Similarly, people usually use is correct because people is the subject of the second clause.

× I'm the buy is not our famous in my country because they are usually used on another another vehicles like a car, motorbike or bus. So this bike is not really.

✓ I think bikes are not very popular in my country because people usually use other vehicles, such as cars, motorbikes, or buses. Therefore, bikes are not very common.

When speaking about bikes and vehicles in general, use plural nouns: bikes, vehicles, cars, motorbikes, and buses. The plural form also matches the general meaning of the answer.