Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer the question directly, then add one or two specific details. Avoid unnatural phrases such as “It was I think yellow color”; say “I think it was yellow” or “It was yellow, I think.” Also, “I used to like to ride the bike” is less natural than “I used to enjoy riding it.” The final sentence, “I remember,” is unnecessary because the previous sentence already expresses your memory.

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to enjoy riding it around my neighborhood after school. It was yellow, and I was very proud of it because it was a birthday present from my parents.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and then explain your reason with accurate, specific language. Say “in South Korea” rather than “in our country South Korea,” and use “a public bike-sharing service” instead of “a government bike.” “Ten hundred bucks” is unnatural and unclear; use “1,000 won” or “a small fee.” You could also mention where people use the bikes, such as along rivers or in city parks. Use linking words such as “because” and “for example” to make the answer more coherent.

Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in South Korea, especially in large cities. This is partly because public bike-sharing services, such as Seoul’s Ttareungi, are affordable and convenient. For example, many people use them to travel short distances or ride along the Han River at weekends.

× It was I think yellow color.

✓ I think it was yellow.

Yellow is an adjective, so it can directly describe the bike after the verb was. The noun color is unnecessary here. Also, I think is placed more naturally before the main clause.

× I think bikes are quite popular in our country South Korea because we have a government bike called Daruni and we can use them if we pay ten hundred bucks.

✓ I think bikes are quite popular in South Korea because we have a government bike called Daruni, and we can use it if we pay a fee.

The noun bike is singular, so it should be replaced by the singular pronoun it, not the plural pronoun them. South Korea is the name of the country, so in South Korea is more natural than in our country South Korea.

× We can use them if we pay ten hundred bucks.

✓ We can use it if we pay a fee.

Ten hundred bucks is an unnatural way to express a payment in this context. Use a clear amount, such as ten dollars or one thousand won, or use a fee when the exact amount is not important.