Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and includes specific details about how and when you used your bike. However, “picked up my siblings to the schools” is unnatural; say “rode with my siblings to school” or “took my siblings to school by bike.” Also, avoid fillers such as “Uh,” and replace “I enjoyed the bike” with the more natural phrase “I really enjoyed riding it.”

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it to school and around my neighborhood every day. On weekends, I often rode with my siblings to the park, so I have very happy memories of cycling.

Suggestion: You give a clear opinion and a reason, but “It’s a bike” is irrelevant and should be removed. Distinguish between bicycles and motorbikes, because they are different types of transport, and replace “people have average income” with “many people have modest incomes.” Complete the final idea by saying “for commuting to work, school, or running daily errands,” and use a linking word such as “because” or “as a result.”

Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially motorbikes. Many people have modest incomes, so they cannot afford cars and use motorbikes to commute to work or school. They are also convenient for running daily errands because they can move through heavy traffic easily.

× Uh, and also I picked up my siblings to the schools and park during the weekends, so I enjoyed the bike.

✓ I also took my siblings to school and the park on weekends, so I enjoyed riding my bike.

The preposition and verb combination in picked up my siblings to is incorrect for this meaning. Use took my siblings to when you mean accompanying or transporting them to a place. On weekends is also the natural prepositional phrase for a repeated weekend activity.

× Uh, and also I picked up my siblings to the schools and park during the weekends, so I enjoyed the bike.

✓ I also took my siblings to school and the park on weekends, so I enjoyed riding my bike.

When enjoy is followed by an activity, it should be followed by a gerund, or verb + -ing form. Therefore, enjoyed riding my bike is correct, not enjoyed the bike when you mean that you enjoyed the activity of riding.

× Many people have average income so they often cannot afford cars and rely on motorbikes to commute to work.

✓ Many people have an average income, so they often cannot afford cars and rely on motorbikes to commute to work.

The singular countable noun phrase average income requires an article. Use an because average begins with a vowel sound. A comma is also appropriate before so when it connects two independent clauses.

× Uh, go to school or a daily rents umm.

✓ They also use motorbikes to go to school or run daily errands.

The original expression is a sentence fragment because it does not have a complete subject-verb structure. Add the subject they and the verb use. The phrase daily rents is not grammatically appropriate here; the correct expression is run daily errands.