Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear, direct, and grammatically accurate. To make it more effective, add one specific supporting detail explaining what you enjoyed about riding your bike or when you used it. This would make the answer more developed while keeping it within two or three sentences.

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I really loved riding it. I usually cycled around my neighborhood with my friends after school, so it was both enjoyable and a good way to stay active.

Suggestion: You answer the question directly and give reasons, but the response is one long sentence with repeated words such as “children and adults” and “also.” Use a clearer structure with linking words such as “This is because” and “In addition.” Correct “her health” to “their health” or “people’s health,” and replace “in the terms of fitness” with “in terms of fitness” or “because it helps people stay fit.” Add a specific example, such as cycling to work or riding in parks, to make your answer more natural and detailed.

Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country among both children and adults. This is because cycling is an inexpensive way to travel and it helps people stay fit. For example, many people ride their bikes in parks at the weekend, while some use them to commute to work.

× Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country among children and also adults because most of the children and adults spend their leisure time cycling and it is very cheap and also it has good effects on her health in the terms of fitness.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country among children and adults because most children and adults spend their leisure time cycling. Cycling is very cheap and also has good effects on their health in terms of fitness.

The pronoun her is incorrect because it does not refer to one specific female person. The sentence refers to children and adults in general, so the plural possessive pronoun their is needed. Also, repeating it makes the sentence less clear, so Cycling is used as the subject of the second sentence.

× Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country among children and also adults because most of the children and adults spend their leisure time cycling and it is very cheap and also it has good effects on her health in the terms of fitness.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country among children and adults because most children and adults spend their leisure time cycling. Cycling is very cheap and also has good effects on their health in terms of fitness.

The standard expression is in terms of fitness, not in the terms of fitness. The preposition and phrase should be used in their fixed form: in terms of.