Part 1
Examiner
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidate
No because my home is very poor in while I was a child so I can't buy a kite, can buy a bike and no from no TV. Just to learn.
Examiner
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidate
Yeah, when I'm straight, I can see many people's. Take the bike to take the spot. I think it's very popular in my country and my city.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Score: 25.0Suggestion: 回答基本回应了“No”,但句子结构和词汇错误较多,影响理解。应直接说明家庭经济状况,并使用过去时,例如“my family was poor”和“we couldn’t afford”。注意不要重复或混淆“kite”和“bike”,也不要加入与问题关系不大的信息。建议用“because”连接原因,再补充一个具体细节,控制在2—3句。
Example: No, I didn’t. My family was quite poor when I was a child, so we couldn’t afford to buy a bike. We didn’t have many things at home, so I mainly focused on studying and playing with my friends.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Score: 40.0Suggestion: 回答表达了自行车很受欢迎的观点,但“when I’m straight”“many people’s”和“take the bike to take the spot”表达不自然,且缺少清晰的原因。可以用“when I’m on the street, I often see many people riding bikes”,并补充自行车受欢迎的具体原因,例如价格便宜、方便通勤或有助于环保。注意使用现在时描述普遍现象,并避免重复“I think it’s very popular”。
Example: Yes, definitely. When I’m on the street, I often see many people riding bikes, especially in my city. They are popular because they are affordable, convenient for short journeys, and better for the environment than cars.
× No because my home is very poor in while I was a child
✓ No, because my family was very poor when I was a child.
“when I was a child”描述的是过去的时间,所以主句应使用过去时“was”,不能用现在时“is”。“in while”搭配错误,应使用时间连词“when”。另外,“home is very poor”表达不自然;“poor”通常用来描述家庭或人,因此应说“my family was very poor”。
× so I can't buy a kite, can buy a bike
✓ So I couldn't buy a bike.
回答的是童年时期的经历,应使用过去形式“couldn't”,而不是现在形式“can't”。“can buy a bike”缺少主语,并且前后意思重复、结构不完整。这里应直接说“So I couldn't buy a bike.”
× and no from no TV.
✓ And we didn't have a TV.
“no from no TV”不是完整、正确的英语句子。描述童年时没有电视,应使用过去时“didn't have”。“TV”作为单数可数名词,在这里需要不定冠词“a”。
× Just to learn.
✓ I just studied.
原句缺少完整的主语和谓语,不能单独构成完整句子。补充主语“I”和过去式谓语“studied”后,句子结构完整。
× Yeah, when I'm straight, I can see many people's.
✓ Yeah, when I'm on the street, I can see many people.
“many”后面应接普通复数名词“people”,不能使用表示所有关系的“people's”。表达“在街上”应使用介词短语“on the street”;“when I'm straight”不能表达这个意思。
× Take the bike to take the spot.
✓ People ride bikes to get around.
原句中的“take the bike”和“take the spot”搭配不自然,不能清楚表达骑自行车出行的意思。这里使用“People”作主语、“ride bikes”作谓语,并用“to get around”表示“到处出行”,句子结构和表达都更准确。