Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 질문에 직접 답했고 의미도 분명하지만, 관사와 전치사가 필요합니다. ‘when I was a child’처럼 말해야 하며, 한 문장으로 끝내기보다 자전거를 언제 또는 어떻게 탔는지 구체적인 세부 내용을 한 문장 추가하면 더 자연스럽고 효과적입니다.

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I usually rode it around my neighborhood after school.

Suggestion: 답변의 시작과 끝이 불명확하고, ‘it it’와 ‘bike keys Kiss bike’처럼 반복되거나 이해하기 어려운 표현이 있습니다. 먼저 ‘Yes, I think bikes are popular in Korea’ 또는 ‘No, I don’t think they are very popular’처럼 의견을 직접 제시한 뒤, 그 이유와 구체적인 예를 연결어로 설명하세요. ‘various designs’는 자전거의 인기 여부를 설명하는 적절한 근거가 아니므로, 자전거 도로·교통 체증·출퇴근 이용 등의 관련 세부 내용을 사용하는 것이 좋습니다.

Example: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Korea, especially among young people. Many people ride them along rivers or use them to avoid traffic during their daily commute.

× Yes I had a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The singular countable noun child needs the indefinite article a. Use a before a singular countable noun when referring to one person or thing. The phrase was a child is the correct expression.

× Um it it isn't because in Korea bike keys Kiss bike was very various design and

✓ Um, they aren't, because bikes in Korea come in a variety of designs.

The question asks about bikes, which is plural, so use the plural pronoun they instead of it. Also, the repeated pronoun it it should be removed. The correction assumes that the unclear phrase bike keys Kiss bike was intended to refer to bikes in Korea.

× Um it it isn't because in Korea bike keys Kiss bike was very various design and

✓ Um, they aren't, because bikes in Korea come in a variety of designs.

The subject bikes is plural, so it must take a plural verb. The singular form was does not agree with bikes. The verb phrase come in agrees with the plural subject and expresses a general fact.

× Um it it isn't because in Korea bike keys Kiss bike was very various design and

✓ Um, they aren't, because bikes in Korea come in a variety of designs.

Design should be plural because the sentence refers to many different designs. The natural expression is a variety of designs, not very various design.