Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer the question directly in the first sentence and avoid repeating the same idea. Use the past tense consistently: say “I had” rather than “I am” or “I can consider.” Also, explain clearly that a tricycle is different from a regular bicycle, and finish your answer with a specific detail about whether you later learned to ride a bicycle. Keep the response to two or three well-connected sentences.

Example: Yes, I had a tricycle when I was about four or five years old. I used it to ride around the neighborhood, but I did not have a regular bicycle when I was older. I eventually learned to ride one when I was a teenager.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and has a clear opinion, but improve the naturalness of phrases such as “in the age group of at around” and “I feel so.” Say “especially among people aged twelve to twenty-two” and use “However” to connect the contrasting point. Add one specific reason or example, such as bicycles being affordable or useful for short journeys, and clarify that road safety is a concern.

Example: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially among teenagers and young adults aged twelve to twenty-two. They are affordable and convenient for short trips, so many people use them for exercise or transportation. However, cycling is not as common as it could be because road safety is still a serious concern in my area.

× when I was a child I am I can consider

✓ when I was a child, I had

The question asks about a past situation, so the past-tense verb had is needed. The expressions I am and I can consider are unnecessary and interrupt the sentence. Use a simple past structure to describe childhood experiences.

× when I was at around four or five years old

✓ when I was around four or five years old

The preposition at is not used before around when stating an approximate age. Say when I was around four or five years old.

× a bike that was those days it was called a tricycle

✓ a three-wheeled bike called a tricycle in those days

The original clause contains two structures joined incorrectly and has an incomplete connection between them. Use a concise noun phrase such as a three-wheeled bike called a tricycle in those days.

× But when I grew older the tri cycle of course I could not have continued that when I grew a little bit older than that and later I did not have

✓ However, as I grew older, I could no longer use the tricycle, and later I did not have a bike.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined without clear grammatical links, and the final phrase did not have is incomplete because it has no object. Divide the ideas logically and add the object a bike. Also, tricycle is written as one word.

× especially in the age group of at around I would say from twelve to twenty or twenty two years of age

✓ especially among people aged twelve to twenty-two

The phrases in the age group of, at around, and from are unnecessarily combined. Use among people aged followed by the age range. Hyphenate the compound number twenty-two.

× I feel so that safety and security

✓ I feel that safety and security

The word so cannot be used in this structure before a that-clause. Use feel that to introduce the opinion or belief being expressed.

× safety and security in my country or in the region where I live is

✓ safety and security in my country or in the region where I live are

Safety and security are two coordinated nouns joined by and, so they normally require the plural verb are. Make sure the verb agrees with the complete subject.

× is not as much as it should have been

✓ are not as good as they should be

Much describes quantity, but safety and security are being evaluated in terms of quality or standard. Use as good as instead. Because the subject is plural, use they should be rather than it should have been.

× it should have been

✓ they should be

The student is describing the current level of safety and security, so the present form should be is appropriate. The plural pronoun they agrees with safety and security. The past form should have been would refer to an earlier situation.