Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundant phrases like “in my childhood” followed by “since” that repeat the time frame. Also vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., use “allowed” once and add a short reason). Keep to at most 3–4 sentences.

Example: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. My parents didn’t allow it because they thought it was unsafe for someone my age, so I learned to travel on foot or by bus instead.

Suggestion: Improve coherence and grammar: begin with a clear statement, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, “because” and “also”). Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use more natural vocabulary (e.g., “fuel efficiency” instead of “fuel average”) and correct small errors like double words (“is is”). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in Pakistan because they are much cheaper to buy and run than cars. They also offer better fuel efficiency and are easier to park in crowded cities, so many people prefer them for daily travel.

× Well, in my childhood I did not have any kind of bike since my parents didn't allow me.

✓ Well, in my childhood I did not have any kind of a bike since my parents didn't allow me.

The phrase 'any kind of bike' is acceptable in casual speech, but more natural and grammatically consistent is 'any kind of a bike' or 'any kind of bike' depends; however here the article 'a' before 'bike' clarifies a single item. Suggest using 'a bike' or 'any kind of bike' consistently. Also consider 'When I was a child' for idiomatic usage.

× According to them, riding a bike was unsafe for me because I was below a certain age.

✓ According to them, riding a bike was unsafe for me because I was below the appropriate age.

The sentence uses past tense correctly, but 'a certain age' is vague and slightly awkward. Replacing with 'the appropriate age' or 'a certain age' is acceptable; here 'the appropriate age' sounds clearer. No tense change needed; suggestion improves clarity.

× Definitely bikes are popular in my country.

✓ Definitely, bikes are popular in my country.

The main issue is word order and punctuation rather than tense. Adding a comma after 'Definitely' makes the sentence more natural. Present simple 'are popular' is correct for general facts.

× People here prefer using bikes over the car since due to its cost efficiency as well as its fuel average.

✓ People here prefer using bikes over cars because of their cost efficiency and better fuel economy.

Problems: 'over the car' should be plural 'over cars' when speaking generally. The phrase 'since due to' is redundant; use 'because of' or 'due to'. 'Fuel average' is incorrect collocation; use 'fuel economy' or 'fuel efficiency'. Also match plural 'their' with 'cars'. This correction fixes prepositions, determiners, and collocations.

× So the main reason behind its popularity is is cost.

✓ So the main reason behind its popularity is cost.

There is a duplicated 'is is' which is a typo; remove the extra 'is'. 'Cost' as a noun works, but more natural phrasing is 'is the low cost' or 'is its low cost'. Suggest 'is its low cost' for clarity.

× As I.

✓ As I said.

'As I.' is an incomplete sentence lacking a verb and object; it's a sentence fragment. Completing it to 'As I said.' or 'As I mentioned earlier.' fixes sentence structure and makes the meaning clear.