Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb tenses and pronouns, avoid repetition, and add one or two specific supporting details connected with linking words. Also correct grammar (e.g. 'ride a bike' not 'drive bicycle', 'we would go' or 'we used to go', 'when I was in fifth grade').

Example: Yes. I had a simple two-wheeler when I was a child. I loved riding it with my friends, and we would often cycle to the roundabout near our school. For example, when I was in fifth grade we used to ride together every morning on the way to class.

Suggestion: Avoid awkward or potentially offensive phrasing (e.g. 'mediocre section'). Begin with a direct opinion, then give clear reasons and a brief example. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and correct article/number agreement and prepositions ('commute to work by bike').

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people find them affordable and convenient for short journeys. For example, commuters often ride motorcycles or bicycles to work to avoid traffic and save money on fuel.

× I love driving bicycle.

✓ I love riding a bicycle.

The verb 'drive' is used for cars; for bicycles the correct verb is 'ride' (verb choice error). Also 'bicycle' requires an article ('a'). Use 'riding' as the correct verb form after 'love' when referring to the activity. Suggestion: use 'I love riding a bicycle.'

× We just go together with my friends and go to roundabout.

✓ We used to go around the roundabout with my friends.

The original uses present tense and awkward preposition 'to roundabout'. The correct expression is 'go around the roundabout' or 'go to the roundabout'. Also tense should match past habit 'used to'. Suggestion: 'We used to go around the roundabout with my friends.'

× For example, I remember the instance whenever I was in class 5th I go with my friends to school.

✓ For example, I remember that when I was in 5th grade I went to school with my friends.

Mixes past time reference with present tense 'go'. Use past tense 'went' to match 'was'. Also 'in class 5th' is incorrect order; use 'in 5th grade' or 'in class 5'. Use 'that when' for clarity. Suggestion: 'I remember that when I was in 5th grade I went to school with my friends.'

× I think that definitely bikes are pretty much popular in my country as the people belong to the Mediocre section of course.

✓ I think that bikes are definitely quite popular in my country because many people belong to the middle-income group.

Word order and adverb placement are awkward ('definitely bikes are pretty much popular'). Place adverbs before adjectives: 'definitely quite popular' or just 'quite popular'. 'Mediocre section' is incorrect collocation; replace with 'middle-income group'. Also use 'because' instead of 'as' for clarity. Suggestion: 'I think that bikes are definitely quite popular in my country because many people belong to the middle-income group.'

× So they don't own a luxurious cars, so they prefer to go on their daily commute to the work on bike.

✓ So they don't own luxurious cars, so they prefer to commute to work by bike.

Article error: 'a luxurious cars' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a'. 'Luxurious' is adjective before plural 'cars'. Use 'commute to work' not 'go on their daily commute to the work'. Use preposition 'by' for modes of transport: 'by bike'. Suggestion: 'So they don't own luxurious cars, so they prefer to commute to work by bike.'

× When I was a child I used to have a bike, not that particular bike that the boys used to drive.

✓ When I was a child I used to have a bike, not the particular bike that the boys used to ride.

Verb choice and agreement: 'drive' is used for cars; for bicycles use 'ride'. 'Used to' is correct for past habitual actions. Suggestion: '...that the boys used to ride.'

× I used to have a bike that was a 2 Wheeler bicycle.

✓ I used to have a two-wheeler bicycle.

Redundant phrasing '2 Wheeler bicycle' should be written as 'two-wheeler bicycle' or simply 'a two-wheeler'. Use hyphenated compound adjective and spell out numbers in speech. Suggestion: 'I used to have a two-wheeler bicycle.'