Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Good direct response with relevant supporting details and clear reason. To improve further, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy and add a linking word to connect ideas more smoothly. Also vary vocabulary a little (e.g., use “ride” alternatives or adjectives) and keep to 2–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I did. When I was seven my parents bought me a small red bicycle, and I rode it in the park almost every afternoon because it was my main way to play with friends. As a result, I felt more independent and confident about going out on my own.

Suggestion: A clear, relevant answer with good reasons. Improve by splitting into two sentences, adding a linking word, and giving a brief specific example or comparison to strengthen the point. Avoid comma splices and aim for slightly more varied vocabulary (e.g., “inexpensive,” “congested”).

Example: Yes, motorbikes are very popular in my country because they are cheaper to buy and inexpensive to maintain. Moreover, people prefer them as they are easier to park and can weave through congested traffic, so commuting is usually much faster than by car.

× My parents bought me a small red bicycle when I was 7 and I rode it in the park almost every afternoon because it was my primary way to play with friends and to feel independent.

✓ My parents bought me a small red bicycle when I was seven, and I rode it in the park almost every afternoon because it was my primary way to play with friends and feel independent.

The sentence mostly uses past tense correctly, but '7' should be written as a word 'seven' in formal writing and a comma is needed before the conjunction joining two independent clauses. Also 'to feel independent' is unnecessary infinitive stacking after 'way' and sounds more natural as 'feel independent.' Suggest writing numbers under ten as words and placing a comma before 'and' joining independent clauses; simplify parallel infinitives into a coordinated structure.

× Yes, motorbikes are very popular in my country, they are cheaper to buy and run than cars, and people prefer them because they are easier to park and can get through heavy traffic quickly.

✓ Yes, motorbikes are very popular in my country. They are cheaper to buy and run than cars, and people prefer them because they are easier to park and can get through heavy traffic quickly.

This sentence contains two independent clauses incorrectly joined by a comma (comma splice). Split into two sentences or use a semicolon or conjunction. Also capitalize 'They' after the sentence break. Tense and verb forms are correct (present simple) for general facts, so no tense change is needed. Suggest avoiding comma splices by separating independent clauses with a period or appropriate conjunction.