Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, correct grammar mistakes, and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (e.g., “and”, “so”, “because”) appropriately, and avoid repetition. Also correct verb tenses and word choice (e.g., ‘rode’ not ‘wrote’).

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it with my parents and brother to my grandfather’s house, which was about a ten-minute ride, and I enjoyed those short family trips.

Suggestion: Improve accuracy and clarity: correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., ‘bikes’, ‘vehicle accidents’, ‘veteran Thailand’ is unclear — say ‘in Thailand it’s very hot’). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., ‘firstly’, ‘secondly’). Avoid vague phrases like ‘I think’ too often.

Example: I don’t think bikes are a main form of transport in my country. Firstly, many people worry about traffic accidents and feel it is unsafe to ride on busy roads; secondly, Thailand’s hot climate makes cycling uncomfortable for long journeys.

× Yes, I used to have a bike when I was a child and I love to ride it with my family, father, brother and mother and we usually wrote it to our grandfather house which took us around 10 minutes.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bike when I was a child, and I loved riding it with my family — my father, mother and brother — and we usually rode it to my grandfather's house, which took us about 10 minutes.

Problems: present vs past tense inconsistency (Grammar problem type ID 6 Present tense issue and 5 Past tense issue) and incorrect verb choice 'wrote' instead of 'rode' (verb error) and possession/article error with 'grandfather house' (Grammar problem type ID 17 Incorrect use of the definite article/22 Article errors) and word order of family members (stylistic). Explanation: The student begins with past habit 'used to have', so subsequent verbs describing past activities should be in past tense: 'loved' and 'rode'. 'Love to ride it' mixes present with past. 'Wrote' is a wrong verb; the correct verb is 'rode' (past of 'ride'). Use the possessive 'grandfather's house' or 'my grandfather's house' and 'about' is more natural than 'around' here. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent (use past for past habits), use correct verb forms ('ride'→'rode'), use possessive for 'grandfather's house', and list family members in a natural order with commas.

× In my opinion, I don't think buys are like the main mode of transportation in my country because I think there's a mini car accident so a lot of people tend to avoid using it.

✓ In my opinion, I don't think bikes are the main mode of transportation in my country because there are frequent minor car accidents, so many people tend to avoid using them.

Problems: incorrect word 'buys' should be 'bikes' (spelling/word choice), awkward phrase 'are like the main' (sentence structure, Grammar problem type ID 26), wrong singular/plural and pronoun agreement 'it' for 'bikes' (Grammar problem type ID 1 Singular and plural issue / 12 Incorrect use of pronouns), and unnatural expression 'mini car accident' (word choice). Explanation: Use the correct noun 'bikes', say 'are the main mode' rather than 'are like the main', and match plural 'bikes' with plural pronouns 'them'. 'Mini car accident' is unclear; 'minor car accidents' or 'frequent minor accidents' is clearer. Suggestion: Use correct spelling, simplify structure, maintain number agreement, and choose clear collocations like 'minor accidents' or 'traffic accidents'.

× And another reason is that the veteran Thailand is very hot, so it's not convenient to ride in the roads.

✓ Another reason is that Thailand is very hot, so it's not convenient to ride on the roads.

Problems: incorrect word 'veteran' (word choice), unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'Thailand' (Grammar problem type ID 17 Incorrect use of the definite article), incorrect preposition 'in the roads' (Grammar problem type ID 11 Incorrect use of prepositions), and slight sentence structure issues. Explanation: Country names like 'Thailand' do not take 'the' here. 'Veteran' is wrong in context — perhaps intended 'overall' or simply remove it. The correct preposition for traveling along roads is 'on the roads'. Suggestion: Remove incorrect words, omit 'the' before country names, and use 'on the roads' when referring to riding along roadways. Keep sentence concise and consistent.