Part 1
Examiner
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidate
Yes, I had the pink beautiful bike when I was a child and it was one of my favorite toys. I'd like together with my friends and take a ride together around our street or maybe in the park that was nearby my house.
Examiner
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidate
Yes, I think so because I often see bikes that you can take for the money for the appropriate time and ride it in the park so or on the street to get somewhere you know you had you have to download the.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Score: 62.0Suggestion: Используйте более естественный порядок слов и простые времена; избегайте лишних слов и исправьте грамматические ошибки. Начинайте с прямого ответа (короткое предложение), затем добавляйте 1–2 поддерживающих предложения с конкретными деталями. Связывайте идеи с помощью слов-связок (for example, so, then).
Example: Yes, I did. I had a pink bike that I loved. For example, I often rode it with my friends around our street and sometimes we cycled in a small park near my house.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Score: 48.0Suggestion: Сформулируйте ответ чётко и завершённо; избегайте неоконченых предложений и повторов. Дайте конкретные причины и примеры, используйте связки (for example, because, so) и правильную лексику для описания аренды велосипедов.
Example: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular. Many cities offer bike-sharing schemes, so people can rent a bike for a short time. For example, I often see tourists and commuters using these bikes to travel short distances and to enjoy parks.
× Yes, I had the pink beautiful bike when I was a child and it was one of my favorite toys.
✓ Yes, I had the beautiful pink bike when I was a child, and it was one of my favorite toys.
Порядок прилагательных в английском обычно ставит оценочные прилагательные (например, beautiful) перед цветом (pink). Также добавлена запятая перед 'and' для соединения двух независимых предложений; это улучшает читаемость и соответствует грамматике.
× I'd like together with my friends and take a ride together around our street or maybe in the park that was nearby my house.
✓ I used to go out with my friends and take rides around our street or sometimes in the park near my house.
Использование 'I'd like' некорректно в описании привычки в прошлом. Следует использовать 'used to' для прошлых привычек. 'Together' повторяется и нарушает естественность; 'take a ride' во множественном целесообразнее как 'take rides'. 'that was nearby my house' лучше как 'near my house' для естественного выражения.
× Yes, I think so because I often see bikes that you can take for the money for the appropriate time and ride it in the park so or on the street to get somewhere you know you had you have to download the.
✓ Yes, I think so because I often see bikes that you can rent for a fee for a certain time and ride in the park or on the street to get somewhere; you just have to download an app.
Фраза 'take for the money for the appropriate time' неестественна; правильнее 'rent for a fee for a certain time'. 'ride it' сокращено до 'ride'. Конструкция 'you know you had you have to download the' бессвязна; исправлено на 'you just have to download an app' для ясности. Предложение также было упрощено и разделено пунктуацией для лучшей структуры.