Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct, use correct tense and clearer vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “No, I didn’t have a bicycle as a child.”), then give one or two concise supporting details. Correct tense: use past tense for childhood. Avoid vague words like “etcetera” and unclear items like “Walker car.” Use linking words such as “but” or “however” correctly.

Example: No, I didn’t have a bicycle when I was a child. Instead, I had a push car (a walker) that I used to sit in and push around the yard, which I enjoyed a lot.

Suggestion: Make your answer more organized and use accurate words and grammar. Begin with a clear opinion sentence (e.g. “Yes, bikes are very popular.”). Then give specific reasons and use linking words (because, for example, however). Avoid repeated phrases and incorrect collocations like “brand hood” or “heavily addicted.” Use singular/plural correctly.

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among teenagers, because they are affordable and convenient. For example, many young people prefer local brands for daily use, while some enthusiasts save up for international brands because of their performance and style.

× No, actually I don't have any bike or etcetera on my childhood, but I have actually a Walker, Walker car and it was a cycle.

✓ No, actually I didn't have any bike or anything like that in my childhood, but I did have a Walker, a walker car, and it was like a cycle.

This sentence mixes present simple ('don't have') with past context ('childhood'). The correct tense for past situations is past simple ('didn't have', 'did have'). 'Any bike or etcetera' is unnatural; use 'any bike or anything like that'. 'On my childhood' is incorrect preposition; say 'in my childhood' or better 'when I was a child'. Also clarify 'Walker, Walker car' as 'a Walker, a walker car' and 'it was a cycle' as 'it was like a cycle' if comparing. Suggestion: use past simple consistently and choose natural expressions: 'I didn't have any bike when I was a child, but I did have a Walker, a walker car, which was like a cycle.'

× Yeah, I think specially teenagers are heavily addicted to bike, just like there are many brand hood what's attract teenager.

✓ Yeah, I think especially teenagers are heavily addicted to bikes, because there are many brands and models that attract teenagers.

Use 'especially' not 'specially'. 'Addicted to bike' needs plural 'bikes' to refer generally (singular/plural issue). 'Many brand hood what's attract teenager' has multiple problems: 'brand hood' is incorrect word choice; use 'brands and models'. 'What's' and 'teenager' are incorrect; use relative clause 'that attract teenagers'. Correct plural forms and word choice for clarity.

× On maximum teenagers are used bikes, but some of some of people have passion about many international brand for their needs.

✓ Most teenagers use bikes, but some people are passionate about many international brands for their needs.

'On maximum' is incorrect; use 'Most' to indicate the majority. 'Teenagers are used bikes' incorrectly uses passive and wrong tense; use active present 'use bikes'. 'Some of some of people' is redundant; say 'some people'. 'Have passion about' should be 'are passionate about' or 'have a passion for'. 'Many international brand' needs plural 'brands'. Also align subject-verb agreement ('Most teenagers use'). Suggestion: simplify to 'Most teenagers use bikes, but some people are passionate about international brands.'