Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문장 구성과 시제 표현을 더 자연스럽게 고치고, 이유를 구체적으로 덧붙이세요. 현재 문장은 의미 전달은 되지만 반복(‘really don’t know’)과 어색한 시제 사용(‘I only got a bad memory’)이 보입니다. 간결한 토픽 문장으로 시작하고, 연결어(for example, because)를 사용해 이유와 결과를 명확히 설명하면 점수가 오릅니다.

Example: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My mother tried to teach me how to ride several times, but I always fell and got scared, so I never learned. As a result, I prefer walking or taking public transport instead.

Suggestion: 의견 제시를 더 명확히 하고 비교와 구체적 근거를 제시하세요. 중복 표현(‘popular popular’)과 어색한 표현(‘some of people can think’)을 피하고, 연결어(‘however’, ‘for example’)를 사용해 비교를 구조화하면 자연스럽습니다.

Example: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in my country. However, in some cities people do use them for short trips. For example, when I visited the Netherlands, there were many more bicycles than cars, which showed me how widespread bike culture can be there.

× Actually I really don't know how to ride a bike.

✓ Actually I didn't really know how to ride a bike.

The question asked about being a child in the past, so the speaker should use past tense. 'Don't know' is present tense; change to 'didn't know' to match past time reference. Suggestion: use past tense consistently when talking about past experiences (didn't know, couldn't, etc.).

× My mom tried to teach me but I only got a bad memory because I fell down.

✓ My mom tried to teach me but I only have a bad memory of it because I fell down.

The sentence mixes past actions with 'got a bad memory' which is awkward. Use 'have a bad memory of it' to describe a continuing recollection. Also 'because I fell down' is fine in past. Alternatively, 'and I remember falling down' is natural. Suggestion: use 'have a memory of' or 'remember + -ing' for recalling past events.

× Maybe some of people can think it's popular but I think it's more popular popular in other countries like Netherlands.

✓ Maybe some people think it's popular, but I think bicycles are more popular in other countries like the Netherlands.

Errors: 'some of people' should be 'some people' (quantifier use), 'it's' is vague—use 'bicycles' to be clear, 'more popular popular' duplicate word, and country name needs 'the' for Netherlands. Suggestion: use correct quantifiers ('some people'), avoid repetition, use definite article with certain country names ('the Netherlands').

× When I went to Netherlands, I saw more bike than the car.

✓ When I went to the Netherlands, I saw more bikes than cars.

Plural forms are needed: 'bike' and 'car' should be 'bikes' and 'cars' because you are comparing counts. Also use 'the Netherlands' with 'the'. Use comparative structure 'more X than Y' with plural nouns when referring to general quantities. Suggestion: ensure nouns agree in number when comparing quantities.