Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more coherent and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences. Correct common errors (use 'yes' or 'I did', not 'Yet I did'; use 'with my friends', 'after school', avoid sentence fragments).

Example: Yes, I did. I enjoyed riding my bike with my friends almost every day after school, and we often raced each other around the neighborhood. It helped me get exercise and made childhood very fun.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion then support it with specific reasons and linking words. Fix word choice and grammar (use 'ride' instead of 'lie'; 'easy to ride', 'easy to transport', and avoid repetition). Provide one or two concrete examples or effects.

Example: Yes, I do. Bikes are very popular because they are cheap and easy to ride, so many people use them for short journeys. For example, in my city many commuters cycle to work to save money and get daily exercise.

× Yet I did I enjoyed by with my colleagues and also my next ball.

✓ Yes I did. I enjoyed riding with my friends and also playing ball.

Original sentence has multiple structure and word choice errors: 'Yet I did' is awkward for affirmative answer (use 'Yes I did'). 'I enjoyed by with' is incorrect verb and preposition usage; correct is 'I enjoyed riding with'. 'my colleagues' is formal and contextually 'friends' is better. 'my next ball' is unclear; likely 'playing ball' (playing with a ball). Suggest separating into two sentences for clarity.

× I lost almost of every day when I finished my school.

✓ I rode almost every day after I finished school.

The student used 'lost' incorrectly; context requires past habitual action 'rode'. 'almost of every day' is ungrammatical; correct phrase is 'almost every day'. 'when I finished my school' should be 'after I finished school' or 'when I finished school'. Suggest using 'rode almost every day after I finished school' to convey intended meaning.

× I had it when I was young and I also love. Riding a bike.

✓ I had one when I was young and I also loved riding a bike.

Tense inconsistency: 'I had it when I was young' (past) should match 'loved' (past) not present 'love'. Fragmentation present: 'I also love. Riding a bike.' should be one sentence. 'it' is vague; use 'one' or 'a bike'. Combine into 'I had one when I was young and I also loved riding a bike.' This keeps past tense consistent.

× Yes I do, I think almost everyone in my family can lie a bike because it's easy to lie and easy to transport from A to B

✓ Yes I do. I think almost everyone in my family can ride a bike because it's easy to ride and easy to use for transport from A to B.

Incorrect verb 'lie' used instead of 'ride' (spelling/word choice). Also 'can lie a bike' violates verb-object pattern. 'it's easy to lie' repeats error. 'transport from A to B' is acceptable but 'use for transport' is clearer. Sentence punctuation improved by splitting into two sentences.

× I Think that better way to save the energy energy and can be exercised as well.

✓ I think that it is a better way to save energy and to get exercise as well.

Missing subject and auxiliary: 'I Think that better way' lacks 'it is' or 'it's'. 'the energy energy' repeats word and 'the' is unnecessary; 'energy' is uncountable so no article needed. 'and can be exercised' is passive and awkward; active infinitive 'to get exercise' or 'to exercise' is clearer. Also fix capitalization of 'Think'.