Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Correct tense and possessive forms (e.g. "gave it to me"). If you mention a name, finish the thought. Use linking words like 'so' or 'because' appropriately.

Example: Yes, I did. My grandparents gave me a bike for my 10th birthday, so I rode it to the park almost every day to play with my friends. I still remember its name, "Speedy," which made it feel special.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and then support it with specific reasons and an example. Correct subject-verb agreement ("people who live"), avoid filler words ("like"), and be careful with word order ("in less time"). Use linking expressions such as 'because' and 'for example' to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, absolutely. Many people who live in city centers prefer bikes because they avoid traffic and can get to places faster. For example, commuters often cycle to work to save time and money.

× Yes, of course, because my grandfather and grandmother gave me for my 10th birthday so I used it every day to go to the park and have fun with my friends.

✓ Yes, of course, because my grandfather and grandmother gave it to me for my 10th birthday, so I used it every day to go to the park and have fun with my friends.

The original sentence omits the object pronoun placement: 'gave me' is incorrect without the direct object 'it'. The correct phrasing is 'gave it to me'. Also add a comma before 'so' to join two independent clauses. Suggestion: place the object 'it' after 'gave' or use 'gave it to me', and punctuate compound sentences with a comma before coordinating conjunctions linking independent clauses.

× I also I still remember the name of my.

✓ I still remember its name.

The original sentence repeats the subject 'I' and ends abruptly with an incomplete possessive 'my'. This is a sentence structure and pronoun reference error. The speaker likely means the bike's name; use the possessive pronoun 'its' and a complete clause: 'I still remember its name.' Avoid repeating subjects and ensure the possessive is complete.

× Yes, absolutely. Especially people that lives in the city center to avoid the traffic and to like reach every part of the city more in in less time possible.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Especially people who live in the city center use them to avoid traffic and to reach every part of the city in less time.

Multiple issues: 'people that lives' uses the wrong relative pronoun and wrong verb form; use 'people who live' (people require plural verb). 'The traffic' can be 'traffic' without 'the'. 'To like reach' is incorrect — remove 'like'. 'More in in less time possible' is ungrammatical and repetitive; correct to 'in less time'. Also change structure to include a main verb ('use them'). Suggestion: use 'who' for people, match verb number with subject, remove filler words like 'like', and simplify time expressions to 'in less time'.