Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct grammar (use past tense consistently and proper sentence structure).

Example: No, I didn't. My family was quite poor when I was a child, so buying a bike was not affordable. However, after I moved to Australia I saved money and finally bought one.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion, then support it with specific and coherent reasons. Use linking words (for example, because, since, therefore) and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement and clearer phrasing).

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are much cheaper than cars. Many people cannot afford a car, so they choose bikes for daily travel; in addition, bikes are easier to maintain and use in crowded cities.

× No, I didn't because in our home with family was very poor and it was so difficult to get it.

✓ No, I didn't, because my family was very poor and it was very difficult to buy one.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and extra phrases ('in our home with family') that make it ungrammatical. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Rearranging to 'my family was very poor' clarifies the subject and using 'buy one' matches 'a bike'. Use commas to separate the clauses and avoid redundant phrases. Suggestion: Keep subject + verb order and omit unnecessary prepositional phrases; use 'buy one' for clarity.

× So that's why after I came to Australia I was able to buy a bike so but for those days I couldn't for sure.

✓ So after I came to Australia, I was able to buy a bike, but back then I couldn't for sure.

This sentence contains redundant connectors and awkward sequencing, a sentence structure error (ID 26). Remove duplicate conjunctions ('so' and 'but') and use 'back then' to refer to the earlier time. Add commas to separate clauses and maintain clear tense: past ability 'was able to' and past inability 'couldn't'. Suggestion: Use a single connector for contrast ('but') and concise temporal phrases ('back then').

× Yeah, bikes are so popular there because they are cheap in comparison with cars who has a car there is because the guy has a really good job or becomes with a rich family.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular there because they are cheaper than cars. If someone has a car, it is usually because he has a good job or comes from a rich family.

The original uses incorrect relative pronoun and verb forms ('who has a car there is because the guy has') and awkward phrasing, an incorrect use of pronouns and sentence structure (ID 12 and 26). Replace 'who' with a conditional or 'if someone', use comparative 'cheaper than', use correct verb forms 'comes from', and avoid 'guy' for neutrality. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'it is usually because he has'. Suggestion: Use clear conditional structures ('If someone has') and correct comparative and verb forms.

× So that's why bikes are so popular there.

✓ So that is why bikes are so popular there.

This is a minor sentence structure/style issue (ID 26). Expand the contraction for formality or keep as is; the main point is clarity and cohesion with the previous sentence. The corrected version keeps meaning and connects logically. Suggestion: Ensure cohesion with previous sentence; 'that is why' clearly indicates cause.