Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar, verb tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct past tense (use "had" and "tried") and remove repetitions. Keep it natural and under five sentences.

Example: Yes. I had my first bike when I was nine years old. I tried cycling for the first time in the park and felt nervous at first, but after a few minutes I became more confident. Since then I have loved riding because it feels fun and freeing.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer then add specific details and use linking words. Fix word order and articles, and use plural/singular correctly (e.g., "on weekends", "I often see"). Be specific about locations or reasons to strengthen your response. Keep to maximum five sentences.

Example: Yes, definitely. Bikes are very popular in my city, especially on weekends. For example, in Shenzhen I often see many young people cycling in parks and along streets, because cycling is cheap, healthy and convenient for short trips.

× I have far back when I was nine years old, I I first time try to cycling in the park.

✓ I remember back when I was nine years old; the first time I tried cycling was in the park.

Errors: incorrect present tense 'have' and wrong word order; missing past tense for 'try' and unnecessary 'to' before 'cycling'. Use past tenses to describe past events: 'remember' or 'I remember back when' and past simple 'tried'. Also use 'tried cycling' (verb + -ing) not 'try to cycling'. Split into clearer clauses for fluency. Suggestion: Use 'I remember' or 'Back when I was nine, the first time I tried cycling was in the park.'

× I was nervous because it is my first time experience, but but after that I love it very much because it is very enjoyable and.

✓ I was nervous because it was my first experience, but after that I loved it very much because it was very enjoyable.

Errors: tense inconsistency—mixing past ('I was nervous') with present ('it is my first time', 'I love'). Use past tense throughout to describe a past event: 'was my first experience', 'loved', 'was enjoyable'. Remove the repeated 'but' and the trailing 'and'. Suggestion: Maintain consistent past tense when narrating past events.

× Yes, of course, especially in the weekend I in the Shenzhen, I always seem many young people to cycling in the park or everywhere such as at the streets.

✓ Yes, of course. Especially on weekends in Shenzhen, I often see many young people cycling in the parks or everywhere, such as on the streets.

Errors: incorrect prepositions and tense/aspect choices. Use 'on weekends' (not 'in the weekend'), 'in Shenzhen' without 'the', 'often see' instead of 'always seem', and 'see many young people cycling' (verb + -ing) not 'to cycling'. Also use 'parks' plural or 'the park' and 'on the streets' not 'at the streets'. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions ('on weekends', 'in Shenzhen', 'on the streets'), use 'see' for perception and '-ing' after 'see' when describing ongoing actions.