Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and use past tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I did), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and long, unorganized clauses. Also correct grammar: use past simple for childhood events and possessive forms correctly.

Example: Yes, I did. My father bought a bike when I was about eight, and we often went on long weekend rides together. Because it was new, we were very excited and I insisted on accompanying him even to places like his school.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion, support it with specific reasons and use linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh, umm) and correct grammar (children → children, subject-verb agreement). Provide one concrete example or comparison to other transport.

Example: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and easy to park. For example, many families buy small motorcycles for daily commuting, while high-powered models like the Royal Enfield Bullet are popular among young men because of their distinctive engine sound and style.

× Yes, I have a bike of my father where we can go for a long ride with him and at the beginning of buying that bike we are very happy and I was always like wants to go wherever my father's school. So yeah, we do have.

✓ Yes, I had my father's bike when I was a child; we could go on long rides together, and when he first bought that bike we were very happy. I always wanted to go wherever my father went to school.

Multiple issues fall under past participle and verb forms: 'have a bike of my father' is incorrect possession expression and tense — use 'had my father's bike'. 'where we can go' should match past context: 'we could go'. 'at the beginning of buying that bike' is ungrammatical; use 'when he first bought that bike' (past simple). 'I was always like wants' mixes past narrative with present verb form and colloquial filler 'like'; use 'I always wanted'. Also 'wherever my father's school' lacks a verb and preposition: 'wherever my father went to school'. Suggestions: keep tense consistent (past) for childhood events, use correct past participle/past simple ('bought'), use natural possession ('my father's bike'), remove filler 'like', and include proper verb phrases for places ('went to school').

× Yeah, I think that bikes are more popular than uh, any vehicles because even uh small children's likes bike.

✓ Yeah, I think that bikes are more popular than other vehicles because even small children like bikes.

Errors: 'any vehicles' is awkward here — use 'other vehicles' for comparison. 'small children's' uses possessive incorrectly; should be plural noun 'children'. 'likes' is third-person singular but subject 'children' is plural, so use 'like'. Also 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match general statement. Suggestions: match number between subject and verb, avoid unnecessary articles or possessives, and use 'other' when comparing categories.

× But most the most popular bikes in my country is Bullet where umm, the sound of it makes everyone.

✓ But the most popular bike in my country is the Bullet, because its sound attracts everyone.

Issues: 'most the most popular bikes' is redundant — use 'the most popular bike'. Subject-verb agreement: if 'bike' singular, use 'is'. 'Bullet' is a model name and should be preceded by article 'the' in this context. 'where' is the wrong connector for reason; use 'because'. 'the sound of it makes everyone' is incomplete and awkward; better: 'its sound attracts everyone' or 'its sound appeals to everyone'. Suggestions: choose correct singular/plural form to match verb, remove redundant words, use appropriate connectors ('because') and clearer verbs ('attracts' instead of 'makes everyone').