Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct, accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “No, I didn’t have a bike as a child.”), avoid incorrect words (“kindness” is wrong here), reduce hesitation, and use correct grammar and tense. Add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (because/so/for example). Keep it within 3–4 short sentences.

Example: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My older brother had one, but my parents wouldn’t buy me one because many bike accidents happened in our area at that time. For example, several children in my neighborhood were injured, so my family felt it was too dangerous.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion, then support it with a specific reason and a brief example. Avoid repetition and hesitations, and use correct verb forms (e.g., “people get” not “a person get”). Use a linking word like “because” or “for example” to connect your reason. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many young people ask their families for a bike when they are 17–20 because it is an affordable and convenient way to travel to school or work. For example, many students commute by bike every day to save money on transport.

× No, when I was a child, I didn't have any kindness, but my elder brother has a bike.

✓ No, when I was a child, I didn't have a bike, but my elder brother had one.

The student used 'any kindness' incorrectly instead of 'a bike' and mixed tenses: 'has' (present) vs past context. This is a pronoun/word choice and tense issue. Use 'a bike' as a countable noun and 'one' as a pronoun to avoid repetition; keep past tense 'had' to match 'when I was a child'. Suggestion: replace incorrect noun with the correct noun, use 'one' for substitution, and maintain past tense consistency. NOTE: This correction focuses on pronoun/word choice per the provided list.

× My family, uh, didn't give me any kinds of bike because of there are a lot of accident.

✓ My family didn't give me any kind of bike because there were a lot of accidents.

'Any kinds of bike' is incorrect quantifier and count noun usage; use 'any kind of bike' or 'any bikes'. 'Because of' followed by clause is incorrect here; use 'because' before a clause. Also tense and number: use past 'were' and plural 'accidents'. Suggestion: use 'any kind of bike' or 'any bikes', and 'because there were a lot of accidents' to correct quantifier, grammar and tense.

× Bike accidents especially happened on that time in our areas, many children also dies.

✓ Bike accidents especially happened at that time in our area, and many children also died.

Use 'at that time' not 'on that time'; 'areas' should be singular 'area' if referring to the locality mentioned or keep plural but adjust article. 'Dies' is present tense; past tense 'died' matches 'happened'. Also add conjunction 'and' to connect clauses. Suggestion: use correct time preposition 'at', match singular/plural appropriately, and use past tense verbs for past events.

× Yes, definitely. I think bikes are popular in my country and whenever, uh, a person get 17 to 20 years old, uh, they all told their family to buy buy a bike for them because if by.

✓ Yes, definitely. I think bikes are popular in my country, and whenever a person is 17 to 20 years old, they ask their family to buy a bike for them.

Several issues: 'a person get' should be 'a person is' (present simple with stative 'be' for age), and 'they all told' mixes past with present context—use present 'ask' to match general truth. Repeated 'buy' removed and 'because if by' is unclear and omitted; if intended, clarify reason. Also remove filler 'uh' and add comma for flow. Suggestion: use 'is' for age, use present simple for habitual actions, and use clear phrasing like 'they ask their family to buy a bike'.