Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce hesitation fillers, tighten sentence structure, and add one or two specific supporting details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain how you learned and why it was memorable. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and use linking words such as “so” or “because” to improve coherence.

Example: Yes, I did. I had a red bike that my father bought for my seventh birthday. I taught myself to ride it by practicing in the park every evening, and after several weeks I felt confident enough to cycle to school. Because of that practice, riding became one of my favorite activities.

Suggestion: Answer directly, avoid repeating phrases, and provide specific reasons and a short example. Use linking words like “because” and “however” to connect ideas. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use more precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘common’ or ‘widely used’).

Example: Not really. Bikes are not very common in my country because many people prefer cars for convenience and there are few safe bike lanes. However, cycling is more popular among students and in some city parks for leisure.

× ...my father bought, uh, bought it for me.

✓ ...my father bought it for me.

The repetition 'bought, bought it' is unnecessary and ungrammatical. Use the simple past 'bought' once to show completed action in the past. Suggestion: remove the repeated word so the sentence reads 'my father bought it for me.'

× I learned biking by, uh, my own and I practiced a lot.

✓ I learned to ride a bike on my own and I practiced a lot.

English commonly uses 'learn to [base verb]' rather than 'learn [verb]-ing' for acquiring skills; 'biking' is acceptable but less natural here. Also 'by my own' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'on my own' meaning alone. Suggestion: use 'learned to ride a bike on my own' for natural, correct phrasing.

× If your meaning of a popularity is to use it a lot by people, no, it's not popular because, uh, people always, uh, always, uh, want to use a car or walk to a school or another place instead of biking.

✓ If by 'popular' you mean used a lot by people, then no, it's not popular because people usually prefer to use a car or walk to school or other places instead of biking.

The original has awkward phrasing and incorrect articles: 'a popularity' is wrong; use 'popular' or 'popularity' without 'a'. 'Used a lot by people' is clearer than 'to use it a lot by people.' Repetition of 'always' is unnecessary; 'usually' fits better. 'Walk to a school' should be 'walk to school' without the article. Suggestion: rephrase for natural collocation and correct article use: 'If by 'popular' you mean used a lot by people, then no...'

× Yes, I did. Uh, when I was a child, I had a red, uh, bike, uh, that my father bought, uh, bought it for me.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, I had a red bike that my father bought for me.

The original contains filler words and a redundant clause 'that my father bought, bought it for me.' Remove fillers and the redundant pronoun 'it' after 'bought' to form a correct relative clause 'that my father bought for me.' Suggestion: speak concisely and avoid repeating verbs or using unnecessary pronouns.

× I learned biking by, uh, my own and I practiced a lot.

✓ I learned to ride a bike on my own and I practiced a lot.

The phrase 'my own' is a possessive determiner that needs 'on' to express doing something alone: 'on my own.' Without 'on' it is incorrect. Also 'biking' is acceptable but 'to ride a bike' is more natural in this context. Suggestion: use 'on my own' when describing doing something without help.