Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문장 구조와 시제 일치를 개선하세요. 현재와 과거 시제가 혼용되어 있고, 문장이 끊겨 자연스럽지 않습니다. 주제 문장으로 간단히 답한 뒤, 과거 시제를 유지하며 구체적인 활동(몇 살 때, 누구와, 얼마나 자주, 어떤 장소)에 대한 정보를 연결어(for example, 'when', 'and', 'so')를 사용해 덧붙이세요. 또한 문장은 최대 5문장 이내로 간결하게 유지하세요.

Example: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I had a red bicycle and I often rode it to the park with my friends. Because I was very active, I spent most afternoons cycling around the neighborhood. I learned to ride at about six years old, and it became my favorite way to exercise and explore.

Suggestion: 의견 제시 후 이유를 논리적으로 연결하세요. 동사 형태와 관사 사용을 정확히 하고 중복 표현을 피하세요. 예를 들어 'we prefer riding bikes to cars'처럼 비교 표현을 사용하고, 연결어(such as, because, therefore)를 통해 구체적 근거(예: 인프라, 비용, 건강)를 제시하면 더 설득력 있어집니다.

Example: Absolutely. Bikes are very popular in my country because our cities have extensive bike lanes and cycling is more affordable than driving. For example, many people cycle to work to avoid traffic and save money on fuel. As a result, cycling is both practical and common in daily life.

× When I was young. I usually go to the park with the bike because I'm very active first.

✓ When I was young, I usually went to the park with my bike because I was very active.

The response mixes past and present tenses. The time marker 'When I was young' requires past tense ('went', 'was') not present ('go', 'I'm'). Also 'the bike' should be 'my bike' to show possession. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently for past time frames and use possessive determiners for owned objects.

× I was very active person and.

✓ I was a very active person.

The sentence is incomplete and missing the article 'a' before 'very active person'. The conjunction 'and' at the end creates a fragment. Suggestion: complete the thought or remove the extraneous conjunction and include the correct article.

× On riding a bike.

✓ I enjoyed riding a bike.

This fragment uses a preposition 'On' incorrectly and lacks a subject and verb. To express habit or enjoyment, use a full clause like 'I enjoyed riding a bike' or 'When riding a bike, I felt free.' Suggestion: use a complete sentence with subject and verb and apply -ing form after verbs that take gerunds.

× Absolutely, riding a bike is very easy to go anywhere and in my country we prefer to riding a bike than riding a car because we we have a great path to go everywhere.

✓ Absolutely, riding a bike makes it very easy to go anywhere, and in my country we prefer riding a bike to driving a car because we have great paths everywhere.

Several issues: 'is very easy to go anywhere' is awkward — use 'makes it very easy to go anywhere.' 'Prefer to riding' is incorrect: 'prefer' should be followed by the gerund ('prefer riding') or 'prefer X to Y' structure. Use 'prefer riding a bike to driving a car' rather than 'than riding a car.' Duplicate 'we' must be removed. 'a great path to go everywhere' should be plural 'great paths everywhere.' Suggestion: restructure the sentence for clarity, use 'prefer ... to ...' with gerunds, and ensure noun number agreement.