Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (umm) and unclear phrases. Correct tense and pronoun errors (e.g., “he would lend me” → “he lent me” or “he used to lend me”). Mention specific ages, where you learned, or how long it took to make it more informative.

Example: Yes, I did. I learned on my older brother’s larger bike because he used to lend it to me, and it was more professional. Later, when I was about six, I got a small bike with stabilizers so I could practise safely until I could ride on my own.

Suggestion: Give a direct opinion, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”). Remove fillers and repeat words. Use clearer vocabulary and complete sentences — mention typical starting age, reasons (cost, transport, culture), and an example to illustrate your point.

Example: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and practical for short journeys. For example, most children start riding at about five or six, and many people use bicycles for commuting or leisure since there are few other entertainment options in some towns.

× I did have a bike.

✓ I had a bike.

ID 6: Present tense issue. The student used 'did have' which is unnecessary for a simple past statement. Use the simple past 'had' to state a past possession. Suggestion: Use 'I had a bike' for clear past-tense narration.

× It all started with my older brother's bike.

✓ It all started with my older brother's bike.

This sentence is correct. The verb 'started' correctly uses the simple past to describe a past event; no change needed.

× I was he would lend me his bike in order to be able to learn since it was bigger and more professional.

✓ He would lend me his bike so I could learn because it was bigger and more professional.

Mix of sentence structure and subject-verb issues (ID 27 and 26). The original 'I was he would lend me' is ungrammatical. Use a clause with the subject 'he' and modal 'would' ('He would lend me') and a purpose/result clause 'so I could learn'. This corrects subject placement and makes the sentence coherent. Suggestion: Keep subject and verb together and use 'so I could' for ability in the past.

× And then I got this little bike with UMM and extra wheels in order to learn UMM.

✓ Then I got a little bike with extra wheels to learn.

Redundant filler words removed and infinitive 'to learn' is more natural than 'in order to learn UMM'. The gerund/infinitive issue (ID 8) here is about choosing the correct form; use 'to learn' to express purpose. Also use 'a little bike' rather than 'this' for simple past narration.

× Yes, I do believe so because everyone umm basically has a bike since umm his at the age of 5 or 6 umm, it's very common in here because you know we don't have umm much things to do in here here.

✓ Yes, I believe so because basically everyone has a bike from the age of five or six; it's very common here because we don't have many things to do.

Multiple issues: present tense phrasing and word choice. 'I do believe so' is acceptable but simpler 'I believe so' is natural. 'Since his at the age' is ungrammatical (ID 12 pronoun misuse); use 'from the age of'. 'Much things' is incorrect quantifier (ID 14); use 'many things'. Remove filler 'umm' and duplicate 'here'. Suggestions: Use 'from the age of five or six', 'many things', and avoid filler words.

× So it's either bike biker bikes or.

✓ So people either ride bikes or do other outdoor activities.

Original is incomplete and ungrammatical. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Provide a complete parallel structure 'either...or...' with two clear options. Suggestion: Complete the alternative and use parallel verbs or noun phrases for clarity.