Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer, grammatically correct, and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses and remove hesitations. For example, use past tense consistently, state the age clearly, and give a brief reason or memory.

Example: Yes, I did not have a bike as a very young child because my parents thought it was unsafe. However, I got my first bike when I was in eighth grade, and I remember practicing with my older cousin until I could ride confidently.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and provide specific reasons with linking words. Replace filler words, correct vocabulary (e.g., 'air pollution'), and avoid absolute statements like 'everyone'. Add one concrete example or statistic if possible.

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheaper and help avoid heavy traffic. For example, many commuters use motorbikes to travel through narrow streets, and cycling is also common in smaller towns where distances are short.

× When I was a child, I don't have any bike as my parents prefer to not to give the child at very early age, uh, due to the safety reason and I, I don't know how to ride it.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have any bike because my parents preferred not to give a child one at a very early age due to safety reasons, and I didn't know how to ride it.

This sentence uses present-tense verbs (don't have, prefer, don't know) while the time reference is in the past ('When I was a child'). Use past tense: 'didn't have', 'preferred', 'didn't know'. Also correct phrasing: 'preferred not to give a child one' and pluralize 'reason' to 'reasons' for natural collocation. Suggestion: consistently use past tense for events that happened in childhood and simplify redundant words (remove filler 'uh' and repeated 'I').

× So yes, but uh, my first I, I have, I had my bike at the first ease, uh, when I'm in eight standard.

✓ So yes, I had my first bike when I was in eighth grade.

This sentence mixes tenses and has unclear phrasing. Use past tense 'had' and past time reference 'when I was in eighth grade.' Remove filler words and redundant pronouns. Replace 'first ease' with 'first bike' and 'eight standard' with 'eighth grade' (or 'in eighth standard' depending on variety). Ensure subject-verb agreement and past tense consistency.

× Bikes in my country are very popular because people, uh, people uh, prefer to go on a bike rather than a car due to the PO pollution and the traffic uh, in the city.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country because people prefer to ride a bike rather than drive a car due to pollution and traffic in the city.

Use correct prepositions and articles: 'popular in my country' (not 'in my country are'), 'prefer to ride a bike' (not 'go on a bike'), and 'drive a car' rather than 'a car' alone. Remove 'the' before 'pollution' unless referring to a specific kind of pollution, and remove 'PO'. Also simplify repetition 'people, people' and filler 'uh'. Maintain present simple for general facts.

× Uh, and yes, everyone has their own bikes in my country.

✓ Yes, most people have their own bikes in my country.

'Everyone has their own bikes' mixes singular 'everyone' with plural 'bikes'; better to use 'their own bike' or rephrase to 'most people have their own bikes.' 'Most people' suits plural 'bikes.' Also avoid filler 'uh.' Use consistent number agreement.