Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar (past tense and articles), sentence structure, and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words like "I think" or "yeah" at the end.

Example: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was five, but it soon broke, so I bought a new one when I was seven. As a result, I learned to ride properly on the second bike and began cycling to friends' houses on weekends.

Suggestion: Make the response more natural and specific. Use correct plural and avoid redundant phrasing. Begin with a clear statement, then add specific examples and a linking word to explain why bikes are popular.

Example: Yes, I do. Many people in my country use bicycles for short trips and exercise; for example, you often see families cycling along the riverside or in parks during weekends, which shows how popular cycling has become.

× I get my first bike at five years old and it was broken, so I got new one at maybe 7 years old I think, yeah.

✓ I got my first bike when I was five years old and it was broken, so I got a new one when I was maybe seven years old.

The sentence mixes present tense 'get' with past context; use past tense 'got' for past events. Also add 'when I was' for age reference, include the indefinite article 'a' before 'new one', and use 'seven' for consistency. Suggestion: keep all verbs in the past tense when describing past experiences and include appropriate articles and time phrases.

× Yes, I think so because many peoples in my country, they always use a bike and ride a bike at Riverside or park.

✓ Yes, I think so because many people in my country always use bikes and ride them at the riverside or in parks.

'Peoples' is incorrect; use the uncountable plural 'people'. 'Many people' is the correct quantifier. Also repeat of 'a bike' is unnecessary; use plural 'bikes' and the pronoun 'them' to refer back. Use 'the riverside' or 'riverside' consistently and plural 'parks' for general places. Suggestion: use correct plural forms and avoid redundant nouns by using pronouns.

× Yes, I think so because many peoples in my country, they always use a bike and ride a bike at Riverside or park.

✓ Yes, I think so because many people in my country always ride bikes at the riverside or in parks.

The original has an unnecessary comma and the redundant subject 'they' after 'many people', creating an awkward structure. Simplify by removing the comma and 'they', and use a single verb phrase 'ride bikes'. Suggestion: avoid repeating the subject; form a single clear clause.