Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammatical accuracy, verb tense consistency and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence (use past tense), then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep it under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink and had rainbow-patterned wheels, which made it easy to spot. Because it was comfortable and fun to ride, I used it to go to friends’ houses and to the park every weekend.

Suggestion: Use consistent tense and clearer linking words to contrast past and present. Begin with a direct topic sentence stating your view, then support with specific reasons or examples. Correct subject-verb agreement and reduce wordiness.

Example: They used to be quite popular when I was younger, but less so now. Nowadays most people drive cars, and busy traffic makes cycling feel unsafe in many cities, so fewer people choose bikes for daily trips.

× Yes, I have a bike that is pink when I was a child with rainbow wheels.

✓ Yes, I had a pink bike with rainbow wheels when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time phrase 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' to match the time reference. Also reorder phrases for natural word order: describe the bike ('a pink bike with rainbow wheels') then state the time. Suggestion: consistently use past tense for past experiences and place descriptive phrases immediately after the noun they modify.'

× I think bikes are pretty popular in my country when I was younger but now not really because most people uses cars and it can be quite dangerous to ride a bike around.

✓ I think bikes were pretty popular in my country when I was younger, but now not really because most people use cars and it can be quite dangerous to ride a bike.

This sentence mixes present and past time references. Use past tense 'were' to match 'when I was younger'. Also correct subject-verb agreement: 'people use' (not 'uses'). Remove redundant 'around' at the end for clarity. Keep 'can be' (present tense) to describe general danger. Suggestion: align verb tenses with time phrases and ensure subject-verb agreement with plural subjects.