Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce repetition, correct grammar, and organise into a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Keep it within 3–4 sentences, fix tense and preposition errors (e.g., “to get to school” not “at around up to school”), and avoid vague phrases like “in this years.” Use a linking phrase to connect the main idea and the details.

Example: Yes. I got a Blue Mountain bike for my eighth birthday and used it as my main way of getting to school and visiting friends. Because it was sturdy and reliable, I rode it almost every day for a few years. As a result, I became much more independent and fit.

Suggestion: Avoid hesitation and repetition, and organise your response with a clear opinion followed by two concise, specific reasons. Use linking words (For example, However, Also) to make the answer coherent. Replace informal fillers (“uh,” “cause”) with full words and give a more balanced view with a brief example or contrast.

Example: I think bikes are moderately popular in my country. For example, many people ride them at weekends for exercise or leisure, and some cyclists choose bikes to reduce their carbon footprint. However, they are less commonly used for daily commuting in cities because public transport and cars are more convenient.

× I was so happy that it became my primary way of transport at around up to school or for example to my friends, which was actually so beneficial in this years.

✓ I was so happy that it became my primary way of transport to get to school or, for example, to visit my friends, which was actually very beneficial in those years.

Error type 10: The original sentence uses awkward and incorrect verb/phrase forms ('at around up to school', 'to my friends') and incorrect time reference ('in this years'). The phrase 'to get to school' correctly uses the infinitive to describe purpose rather than the incorrect prepositional phrase. 'To visit my friends' is a correct infinitive phrase. 'In this years' is grammatically incorrect; use 'in those years' to refer to past time, and 'very beneficial' is the correct collocation. Suggestion: Use clear infinitive purpose phrases (to get to...), correct time reference (those/that year), and appropriate adverb collocations (very beneficial).

× I'd say that they are moderately popular cause some people use it for exercise or to have fun just on weekends to, to reduce the carbon footprint.

✓ I'd say that they are moderately popular because some people use them for exercise or to have fun just on weekends, and to reduce the carbon footprint.

Error type 12: Pronoun disagreement: 'they' refers to 'bikes' (plural), but the sentence uses 'it' (singular). Also 'cause' should be 'because' in formal speech, and repetition 'to, to' is redundant. Suggestion: Match pronouns to their antecedents ('them' for 'bikes'), use 'because' for clarity, remove duplicate words, and join related ideas with 'and'.

× Uh, I'd say that people in my country use it for just, for just having fun.

✓ Uh, I'd say that people in my country use them just for having fun.

Error type 12: Pronoun error: 'people' (plural) should refer to 'bikes' with the plural pronoun 'them', not 'it'. Also avoid repetition ('for just, for just') and place 'just' in the natural position ('use them just for having fun'). Suggestion: Ensure pronoun number matches the noun and remove repeated words.