Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cevap çok kısa ve açıklayıcı değil. Konuya doğrudan bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, ardından 1–2 destekleyici cümle ekleyin (ör. ne zaman ve nasıl kullandığınız, kimden aldığınız veya bisiklet sürmenin size ne hissettirdiği). Bağlaçlar kullanarak cümleleri birbirine bağlayın ve maksimum 5 cümleyi aşmayın.

Example: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was seven and I used to ride it to the park every afternoon. It helped me become more independent and I often rode with my friends on weekends.

Suggestion: Cevap iyi bir görüş belirtiyor ama anlatım karışık ve dilbilgisi hataları var. Net bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, ardından neden popüler olduğunu ve popülaritenin yaşla neden azalabileceğini iki kısa ve bağlantılı cümleyle açıklayın. Gereksiz duraklamalardan kaçının ve daha ilgili kelimeler kullanın (ör. “children” yerine “children’s bikes” veya “young people”).

Example: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and young people. However, their use tends to decline in adulthood because many adults prioritize work and long commutes, which makes cars or public transport more practical.

× Yes, exactly. From my perspective, buying uh two special children is very umm, popular in our country.

✓ Yes, exactly. From my perspective, buying two special children's bikes is very popular in our country.

The phrase 'two special children' incorrectly uses a quantifier with a noun that should be 'children's bikes' to show possession. It also omits the noun 'bikes'. Suggestion: use 'two special children's bikes' or 'two special bikes for children' to clarify meaning and correct noun phrase structure.

× While growing up it can decrease because uh, most of people concentrate only job life.

✓ As children grow up, interest in them can decrease because most people concentrate only on their jobs.

The original sentence has several issues: 'While growing up' is a dangling modifier; 'it' lacks a clear referent; 'can decrease' needs a clear subject 'interest in them' or 'interest in bikes'; 'most of people' should be 'most people'; and 'concentrate only job life' is missing the preposition 'on' and the possessive 'their' and a plural noun 'jobs'. Suggestions: start with 'As children grow up' or 'As they grow up', specify what decreases ('interest in bikes'), use 'most people' and 'concentrate on their jobs'.