Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve tense accuracy, conciseness, and sentence structure. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid mixing present and past tenses and reduce redundancy.

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride it by practising around Potokin Pilot Elementary School, and within a few weeks I could cycle confidently without help.

Suggestion: Give a clearer, more specific reason and remove unclear phrases. Use linking words (because, for example, therefore) and include a concrete detail or example. Avoid vague terms like 'NA nationally'.

Example: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and commuting. For example, I often see shoppers and students riding bicycles in city markets and near schools.

× Yes I do, I was able to cycle around the Potokin Pilot elementary school and taught myself how to ride a bike.

✓ Yes, I did. I could cycle around Potokin Pilot Elementary School and taught myself how to ride a bike.

The examiner asked about the past (when you were a child), so the response should use past tense. 'Yes I do' is present tense; change to 'Yes, I did.' 'I was able to' is acceptable but 'I could' is a more natural past ability expression. Capitalize the proper noun 'Potokin Pilot Elementary School.' Keep 'taught myself' in the past to match timeline. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for events that happened in childhood. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Yes, I think so, and it is because there are a lot of people who would buy bicycles around town and even NA nationally.

✓ Yes, I think so, because many people buy bicycles in town and across the country.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect quantifier/abbreviation 'NA nationally.' Use 'many' rather than 'a lot of' for more concise formal speech. Use simple present 'buy' to express general truth. Replace 'around town and even NA nationally' with 'in town and across the country' to convey local and national popularity. The sentence structure is improved by removing 'it is because' and linking reason directly with 'because.' Grammar problem type ID: 14