Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then briefly add one or two specific details. Avoid repetition (e.g., don’t repeat 'after'). Use a linking word to connect the cause and effect (e.g., 'so' or 'therefore'). Also use more natural phrasing for past habits (e.g., 'I used to').

Example: Yes, I used to have a bike and I often rode it around our neighborhood. However, I stopped riding it after an accident that left me with some scratches, so I was afraid to ride again.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence then support it with two specific reasons. Reduce hesitation words (e.g., 'uh') and correct grammar (plural agreement, article use). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to make reasons clear and logical.

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive to run and convenient for short trips. For example, many people ride bikes to school or work to avoid high fuel costs, and others use them for shopping in local markets.

× Yes, when I was a child I had a bike and I've been using it around our neighborhood.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a bike and I used it around our neighborhood.

The sentence mixes past simple ('had') with present perfect continuous ('I've been using'), which is inappropriate because the action refers to a past habitual activity that no longer continues. Use simple past ('used') to keep consistent past reference. Suggestion: Use past simple for completed or habitual actions in the past: 'I used it around our neighborhood.'

× But after the accident, after having those scratches in my body, I stopped using the bike.

✓ But after the accident, when I had those scratches on my body, I stopped using the bike.

The phrase 'after having those scratches in my body' is unnatural. Use past simple 'had' for a past state and the preposition 'on' for injuries on the body. Also 'when' connects the timing more naturally. Suggestion: 'when I had those scratches on my body' or 'after I got those scratches on my body.'

× Uh, yes, it's very popular.

✓ Uh, yes, they're very popular.

The student refers to 'bikes' (plural) but used 'it's' singular. This is a pronoun-number mismatch. Use plural pronoun 'they're' to agree with plural noun 'bikes.' Suggestion: Match pronoun number to the noun: 'bikes... they're very popular.'

× People are using it for for the school and for the work.

✓ People use them for school and for work.

Several issues: 'using it' is singular while 'people' implies plural objects (bikes), and 'for the school'/'for the work' use unnecessary articles. Also present simple 'use' is more natural for general habits than 'are using.' Suggestion: 'People use them for school and for work.'

× And then sometimes they buy for market.

✓ And sometimes they go to the market to buy things.

The original lacks a clear subject/object structure and misuses the preposition 'for.' A natural expression is 'go to the market to buy (things)' or 'buy at the market.' Suggestion: 'they go to the market to buy things' or 'they buy at the market.'

× They will not use a car because it's it's so expensive for the gas.

✓ They won't use a car because gas is so expensive.

The use of 'will' is unnecessary when stating a general habitual preference; present simple ('don't use'/'won't use') can be acceptable but present simple is better: 'they don't use cars.' Also 'it's it's' repeats and 'expensive for the gas' is unidiomatic. Use 'gas is so expensive' or 'petrol is so expensive.' Suggestion: 'They don't use cars because gas is so expensive.'

× They will choose to ride a bike instead.

✓ They choose to ride a bike instead.

Using 'will choose' implies future decision, but the sentence describes a habitual choice. Present simple 'choose' is appropriate. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions: 'They choose to ride a bike instead.'